Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và nói rõ ràng vị trí của quê hương. Ví dụ, bạn có thể nói: "My hometown is Even Town, which is a suburb of Hanover, the capital."

例: My hometown is Even Town, which is a suburb of Hanover, the capital city.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ. Hãy dùng các liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy và cụ thể hơn. Ví dụ: "I like the environment of my hometown because it is located in the suburbs, so there are fewer vehicles, the air is cleaner, and we can avoid noise pollution."

例: I like the environment of my hometown because it is located in the suburbs, so there are fewer vehicles, the air is cleaner, and we can avoid noise pollution.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và đúng ngữ pháp hơn. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp về thời gian sống ở đó và thêm chi tiết hỗ trợ. Ví dụ: "I have lived there since I was born because my parents bought a house there. It is a great place with a friendly community."

例: I have lived there since I was born because my parents bought a house there. It is a great place with a friendly community.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời mạch lạc và chính xác hơn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Dùng liên từ để câu trả lời logic hơn. Ví dụ: "I don't think so because my hometown is in the suburbs, and the capital city offers more job opportunities. Therefore, young people usually move to the capital to find suitable jobs."

例: I don't think so because my hometown is in the suburbs, and the capital city offers more job opportunities. Therefore, young people usually move to the capital to find suitable jobs.

× My hometown is in Even town is located in a suburb of Hanover Capital.

✓ My hometown is Even town, which is located in a suburb of Hanover Capital.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence combining two independent clauses without proper conjunction or punctuation. It should be corrected by using a relative clause to connect the ideas properly.

× You know that Indian town is located in in the suburbs of capital leading to there is a fewer vehicles, the air is cleaner and we can avoid a noise pollution.

✓ You know that Indian town is located in the suburbs of the capital, so there are fewer vehicles, the air is cleaner, and we can avoid noise pollution.

The sentence has repeated prepositions ('in in'), missing definite article before 'capital', incorrect use of 'there is' with plural noun 'vehicles', and unnecessary article before 'noise pollution'. Correct prepositions and articles improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I live there. When I was born, my mom and my dad married and they buy that house.

✓ I have lived there since I was born. My mom and dad got married and bought that house.

The sentence incorrectly uses present tense 'live' and 'buy' when referring to past events. 'Have lived' indicates duration from past to present. 'Got married' and 'bought' are the correct past tense forms.

× I don't think so, because it's located in a suburb pavilion and you know that in the capital there was more job opportunities.

✓ I don't think so, because it's located in a suburb called Pavilion, and you know that in the capital there are more job opportunities.

The phrase 'in a suburb pavilion' is unclear; it should be 'in a suburb called Pavilion'. Also, 'there was more job opportunities' is incorrect because 'opportunities' is plural and present tense is appropriate here, so 'there are more job opportunities' is correct.