Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần tránh hỏi lại câu hỏi của giám khảo và nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng hơn. Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề để trả lời và sau đó bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể, tránh lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp.

例: My hometown is a peaceful countryside located in central Vietnam. It is famous for its colorful beaches and beautiful landscapes. I love it because it is quiet and has many natural attractions that make it unique.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, tránh lỗi sai như 'well known to read a destination'. Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, mạch lạc và có liên kết logic giữa các ý. Nên dùng từ vựng phù hợp và cụ thể hơn.

例: I like my hometown because it has beautiful natural landscapes and popular tourist spots like Colorado Beach. It attracts many visitors, which creates a lively and vibrant atmosphere that I really enjoy.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý thì động từ cho phù hợp (ví dụ: 'I have lived' thay vì 'I live'). Câu trả lời khá tốt nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ.

例: I have lived in this city for about seven years with my family. It is a peaceful and friendly place, which makes me feel very comfortable. Living here has given me many good memories and a strong sense of belonging.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp số nhiều/số ít và cách dùng từ chính xác (ví dụ: 'the young generation' hoặc 'young people'). Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn và có liên kết giữa các ý bằng các từ nối phù hợp.

例: Actually, I think my hometown is not the best place for young people because many of them need to move to big cities to find good job opportunities. Although some cities offer great career prospects and a vibrant lifestyle, it really depends on the location.

× Is it famous for its beautiful scenery including colorful beach and beautiful landscape?

✓ It is famous for its beautiful scenery including colorful beaches and beautiful landscapes.

The definite article 'the' is missing before 'colorful beach' and 'beautiful landscape'. Also, 'beach' and 'landscape' should be plural to match the context of multiple natural features. Use 'beaches' and 'landscapes' to correctly refer to multiple items.

× I love a lot of things in my hometown as is famous for its natural landscape and well known to read a destination like Colorado Beach and Uncle Hometown.

✓ I love a lot of things in my hometown as it is famous for its natural landscapes and well known as a destination like Colorado Beach and Uncle Hometown.

The sentence is missing the subject 'it' before 'is famous'. Also, 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to refer to multiple features. The phrase 'well known to read a destination' is incorrect; it should be 'well known as a destination' to express the intended meaning.

× So I'm really proud of this place because it attract many visits there and quite a lively atmosphere.

✓ So I'm really proud of this place because it attracts many visitors and has quite a lively atmosphere.

The verb 'attract' should be in third person singular form 'attracts' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. 'Visits' should be 'visitors' to correctly refer to people who visit. Also, 'has' is needed before 'quite a lively atmosphere' to complete the sentence.

× I live in this city for about 7 years with my family.

✓ I have lived in this city for about 7 years with my family.

The present perfect tense 'have lived' is required here to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present. Using simple present 'live' is incorrect for expressing duration.

× It's a peaceful and friendly place which make me feel very comfortable to live, and living here has given me many good memories and a strong sense of sense of belonging.

✓ It's a peaceful and friendly place which makes me feel very comfortable to live, and living here has given me many good memories and a strong sense of belonging.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'place'. Also, 'sense of sense of belonging' is repetitive; it should be 'sense of belonging'.

× Actually, I guess that my hometown is not a best place for young people.

✓ Actually, I guess that my hometown is not the best place for young people.

The phrase 'a best place' is incorrect because 'best' is a superlative adjective and requires the definite article 'the' instead of the indefinite article 'a'.

× Many young generation need to move to big cities to find good job opportunities.

✓ Many young people need to move to big cities to find good job opportunities.

'Young generation' is incorrect; the correct plural noun is 'young people' to refer to multiple individuals. 'Generation' is a collective noun and usually used with 'a' or 'the'.

× We can be very competitive and stressful.

✓ It can be very competitive and stressful.

The subject 'we' is incorrect here because 'competitive and stressful' describe the environment or situation, not people. The correct subject is 'it' referring to the city or environment.

× However, some city do offer great career prospects and a vibrant lifestyle.

✓ However, some cities do offer great career prospects and a vibrant lifestyle.

'City' should be plural 'cities' to agree with 'some'. Also, the verb 'do' correctly agrees with plural subject 'cities'.

× So it really depend on the location.

✓ So it really depends on the location.

The verb 'depend' should be in third person singular form 'depends' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.