Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，并正确使用时态和介词。可以先直接回答问题，然后补充具体信息。

例: My hometown is Qing Ping, a beautiful village located in the southeast of Sichuan province. Recently, it has become famous because pandas have been reintroduced there.

提案: 回答较长且有些重复，建议使用连词使句子更连贯，同时避免重复表达。可以用更地道的表达方式描述自然环境。

例: I like the rich and diverse natural landscapes in my hometown. When walking in the forest, you can enjoy fresh air and see many green plants, which feels like being in a natural oxygen bar.

提案: 时态使用不当，表达不够清晰，建议使用现在完成时描述居住时间，并简化表达，避免模糊的比喻。

例: I have lived there for about six years and had a very colorful childhood. It was very different from my current city life, but it was real and meaningful to me.

提案: 语法错误较多，表达不流畅，建议简化句子结构，正确使用时态和单复数形式，并用连词连接句子，使表达更自然。

例: I don't think my hometown is a good place for young people because there are few job opportunities. Also, the medical facilities are still developing, which can be a concern.

× My hometown is a very beautiful village which is named Qing Ping and it's located and southeast of Sichuan province and recently the pandas will recovered here in so this event make it famous now.

✓ My hometown is a very beautiful village named Qing Ping, and it's located in the southeast of Sichuan province. Recently, pandas have been recovered here, so this event has made it famous now.

句中“located and southeast”应为“located in the southeast”，介词使用错误（问题类型11）。“pandas will recovered”时态和助动词使用错误，应为现在完成时“have been recovered”（问题类型5和4）。“this event make it famous now”主谓不一致，应为“has made”（问题类型27和5）。

× My hometown is a very beautiful village which is named Qing Ping and it's located and southeast of Sichuan province and recently the pandas will recovered here in so this event make it famous now.

✓ My hometown is a very beautiful village named Qing Ping, and it's located in the southeast of Sichuan province. Recently, pandas have been recovered here, so this event has made it famous now.

“located and southeast”中的“and”应为介词“in”，表示地点。介词使用错误导致句意不清。

× My hometown is a very beautiful village which is named Qing Ping and it's located and southeast of Sichuan province and recently the pandas will recovered here in so this event make it famous now.

✓ My hometown is a very beautiful village named Qing Ping, and it's located in the southeast of Sichuan province. Recently, pandas have been recovered here, so this event has made it famous now.

“will recovered”中“will”后应接动词原形，且此处时态不合适，应使用现在完成时，表示最近发生的动作。

× I had lived here for about 6 years and here I had a very colorful childhood.

✓ I have lived here for about 6 years, and I have had a very colorful childhood here.

“had lived”和“had a colorful childhood”使用过去完成时不合适，应使用现在完成时表示从过去持续到现在的状态。

× I mean it is very different to my city life now.

✓ I mean it is very different from my city life now.

“different”后应接介词“from”表示比较对象，使用“to”错误。

× Maybe my expression is like a utopian, but it's my really and my realism.

✓ Maybe my expression is like a utopia, but it's really mine and my realism.

“a utopian”应为名词“a utopia”，且“my really”应为“really mine”，代词使用错误。

× I don't think it's a good place for young people because there was there is few a job opportunities is not expand for young people who have to earn a living for himself or herself and the medical facilities is developing.

✓ I don't think it's a good place for young people because there are few job opportunities and they are not expanding for young people who have to earn a living for themselves, and the medical facilities are developing.

“there was there is few a job opportunities”中“was”与“is”混用，且“few a job opportunities”结构错误，应为“there are few job opportunities”。“is not expand”应为“are not expanding”，动词形式错误。代词“himself or herself”应改为复数“themselves”，与复数主语一致。

× I don't think it's a good place for young people because there was there is few a job opportunities is not expand for young people who have to earn a living for himself or herself and the medical facilities is developing.

✓ I don't think it's a good place for young people because there are few job opportunities and they are not expanding for young people who have to earn a living for themselves, and the medical facilities are developing.

主谓不一致，“job opportunities”为复数，谓语应使用复数形式“are”。“medical facilities”复数，谓语应为“are”。