Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct and clear response with correct sentence structure. Avoid redundancy and irrelevant details. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add brief supporting details.

例: My hometown is Hyderabad, which is the capital city of Telangana. I have lived there since I was a child in an independent house located in the heart of the city with my family.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and specific details. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide clear examples. Also, try to pronounce names correctly and complete your sentences.

例: I like many things about my hometown, especially the historical monuments like Charminar, which is very popular. Additionally, there is a beautiful park located right beside it where people often relax.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical mistakes. Provide a clear and concise response with proper sentence structure. Use linking words to explain your family background briefly and how long you have lived there.

例: I have lived in Hyderabad since my childhood. My father was born and raised here, while my mother moved here after marriage. We have been living in the city ever since, and I really love it.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Focus on giving a direct answer with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically and avoid irrelevant information.

例: Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because it offers many job opportunities. Additionally, the city has excellent medical services and recreational facilities that attract youngsters.

× My hometown is Hyderabad which is a capital of the land right now I'm leaving her since my instance by child in independent house which is located in the heart of the city Hydro box with my family and siblings.

✓ My hometown is Hyderabad, which is the capital of the country. Right now, I am living here since my childhood in an independent house located in the heart of the city, Hyderabad, with my family and siblings.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'capital' because it refers to a specific capital city. Also, 'the land' is vague and should be replaced with 'the country' for clarity. Additionally, 'an independent house' needs the indefinite article 'an' before a vowel sound. The sentence was also restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× My hometown is Hyderabad which is a capital of the land right now I'm leaving her since my instance by child in independent house which is located in the heart of the city Hydro box with my family and siblings.

✓ My hometown is Hyderabad, which is the capital of the country. Right now, I am living here since my childhood in an independent house located in the heart of the city, Hyderabad, with my family and siblings.

The phrase 'leaving her since my instance by child' is incorrect. It should be 'living here since my childhood'. The preposition 'in' is used correctly with 'an independent house'. The sentence was corrected to use appropriate prepositions and phrases for clarity.

× My hometown is Hyderabad which is a capital of the land right now I'm leaving her since my instance by child in independent house which is located in the heart of the city Hydro box with my family and siblings.

✓ My hometown is Hyderabad, which is the capital of the country. Right now, I am living here since my childhood in an independent house located in the heart of the city, Hyderabad, with my family and siblings.

The pronoun 'her' is incorrectly used to refer to the city. It should be 'here' to indicate the place where the speaker is living. Correct pronoun usage improves sentence clarity.

× As I have lived here since my time, there are many things which I like about my hometown, specially the monuments like John May not and which are quite popular and there is also a place which is situated right beside it is but.

✓ As I have lived here since my childhood, there are many things I like about my hometown, especially the monuments like Charminar, which are quite popular. There is also a place situated right beside it called Bagh-e-Bahu.

The definite article 'the' is correctly used before 'monuments' and 'place' when referring to specific known entities. The sentence was corrected for clarity and to fix the incorrect names and structure. 'John May not' seems to be a mishearing or misspelling of 'Charminar', a famous monument in Hyderabad. 'But' is unclear and replaced with a plausible place name for coherence.

× I'm I have lived in this place since my childhood as my father has born and raised in Hyderabad and my mother came from roller area but after marriage she got settled in the city the.

✓ I have lived in this place since my childhood as my father was born and raised in Hyderabad, and my mother came from a rural area. But after marriage, she settled in the city.

The verb 'has born' is incorrect; the correct past tense passive form is 'was born'. 'Got settled' is better expressed as 'settled'. Also, 'roller area' is likely a mishearing of 'rural area'. The sentence was corrected to use proper past tense forms and clearer vocabulary.

× I'm I have lived in this place since my childhood as my father has born and raised in Hyderabad and my mother came from roller area but after marriage she got settled in the city the.

✓ I have lived in this place since my childhood as my father was born and raised in Hyderabad, and my mother came from a rural area. But after marriage, she settled in the city.

The phrase 'came from roller area' is incorrect; it should be 'came from a rural area'. Also, 'in the city the' is incorrect; 'in the city' suffices. Prepositions and articles were corrected for proper usage.

× I'm I have lived in this place since my childhood as my father has born and raised in Hyderabad and my mother came from roller area but after marriage she got settled in the city the.

✓ I have lived in this place since my childhood as my father was born and raised in Hyderabad, and my mother came from a rural area. But after marriage, she settled in the city.

The pronoun 'she' is correctly used here. No pronoun error was found in this sentence after correction.

× So since then we are we have been staying in in the city and I really love the color.

✓ So since then, we have been staying in the city, and I really love the culture.

The word 'color' seems to be a mishearing or typo for 'culture'. The definite article 'the' is correctly used before 'city'. The sentence was corrected for clarity and meaning.

× Active Minds is very good place for the young people as it has many a lot of job opportunities for youngsters and also additionally there medical service here is IN2482747 and besides there are also.

✓ Active Minds is a very good place for young people as it has a lot of job opportunities for youngsters. Additionally, there are good medical services here, and besides, there are also other facilities.

The phrase 'many a lot of' is redundant; either 'many' or 'a lot of' should be used. 'Medical service here is IN2482747' is unclear and likely a transcription error; it was corrected to 'there are good medical services here'. The sentence was restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.