Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer has some grammar and vocabulary errors that affect clarity. Try to use correct prepositions and articles, and avoid unclear words like 'someone' and 'soul' (should be 'Seoul'). Also, keep your sentences concise and clear.

例: My hometown is a small city located right next to Seoul. I have lived there since I was born, so I know it very well. Although it is not very big, it has everything I need for my daily life.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains some pronunciation and word choice errors like 'numb' and 'fills come'. Try to use correct adjectives and linking words to make your answer more natural and coherent.

例: I like my hometown because it is quiet and not too crowded. There aren't many cars or people, so it feels calm and comfortable for me. Also, the buses and subways are easy to use, making it simple and efficient to travel anywhere.

提案: Your answer has grammar mistakes and unclear phrases like 'city bear well' and 'more than 100'. Focus on using correct verb forms and clear expressions. Keep your answer direct and relevant.

例: I have lived there since I was born, so I know the city very well. It is not a very big city, but it has everything I need for my daily life.

提案: Your answer has unclear words like 'some NUM' and grammar errors. Try to use correct nouns and plural forms, and avoid repeating the same phrase. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I think my hometown is very good for young people because there are many parks and natural places. When they want to relieve stress, they can easily find peaceful spots to relax.

× My hometown is someone which is located in right next to soul.

✓ My hometown is somewhere which is located right next to Seoul.

The word 'someone' is a pronoun used for people, but here the student meant a place, so 'somewhere' is correct. Also, 'soul' is a misspelling of 'Seoul', the capital city of South Korea.

× My hometown is someone which is located in right next to soul.

✓ My hometown is somewhere which is located right next to Seoul.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary before 'right next to'. The correct phrase is 'located right next to' without 'in'.

× I notice it he very well.

✓ I know it very well.

The phrase 'notice it he' is incorrect. The student likely meant 'know it'. 'Notice' means to observe, but 'know' is appropriate for familiarity. Also, 'he' is an incorrect pronoun here.

× It's not a bit, it's not a very big city, but it's more than an has everything I need for my daily life.

✓ It's not big, it's not a very big city, but it has everything I need for my daily life.

The phrase 'not a bit' is incorrect here; 'not big' or 'not a very big city' is correct. Also, 'more than an has' is incorrect; it should be 'but it has'.

× I liked it so numb is quiet and not too crowded and there aren't too many cars or people so it fills come and comfortable for me.

✓ I like it because it is quiet and not too crowded and there aren't too many cars or people so it feels calm and comfortable for me.

The student used past tense 'liked' but is describing a current state, so present tense 'like' is correct. 'Numb' is incorrect; likely meant 'because'. 'Fills come' is incorrect; should be 'feels calm'.

× I liked it so numb is quiet and not too crowded and there aren't too many cars or people so it fills come and comfortable for me.

✓ I like it because it is quiet and not too crowded and there aren't too many cars or people so it feels calm and comfortable for me.

The phrase 'fills come' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'feels calm'. Also, 'numb' is a wrong word here; 'because' fits the meaning.

× Also the buses and subways are really easy to use so going anywhere is simple and efficient.

✓ Also, the buses and subways are really easy to use, so going anywhere is simple and efficient.

A comma is needed after 'Also' and before 'so' to separate clauses properly.

× I have lived there since I was born so I know the city bear well.

✓ I have lived there since I was born so I know the city very well.

The word 'bear' is incorrect here; the student likely meant 'very'. Also, 'know' is correct present tense for current knowledge.

× It's not a very big cities but it's more than 100 and has everything I need for reminded life.

✓ It's not a very big city but it has more than 100,000 people and has everything I need for my daily life.

'Cities' should be singular 'city' because the subject is singular. 'More than 100' is incomplete; likely meant 'more than 100,000 people'. 'Reminded life' is incorrect; should be 'daily life'.

× Yes, I think some NUM is very beneficial for a young people because there are a lot of park and natural places an when they want to relieve their stress, they can be easily to relieve their stress.

✓ Yes, I think some places are very beneficial for young people because there are a lot of parks and natural places and when they want to relieve their stress, they can easily do so.

'Some NUM' is unclear; likely meant 'some places'. 'A young people' is incorrect; 'young people' is plural and does not need 'a'. 'Park' should be plural 'parks'. 'An' should be 'and'. 'Can be easily to relieve' is incorrect; correct form is 'can easily do so'.