Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear and direct response with correct sentence structure. Also, avoid redundancy and be concise.

例: My hometown is Cortana, located in the southern part of Myanmar. It is famous for its many beautiful beaches.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details. Also, correct grammar and sentence structure will improve your response.

例: I like my hometown because it has many hills and beautiful beaches. The natural scenery is very peaceful, which makes it a great place to live.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and grammatically incorrect. Provide a full sentence that directly answers the question with correct tense usage.

例: I lived there for about 10 years before I moved away.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many errors. Try to clearly express your opinion with supporting reasons using correct grammar and vocabulary.

例: Yes, my hometown is good for young people, but I recommend other cities for better education and job opportunities.

× My hometown is located in South and part of. Yanmar is called Cortana, which have so many beautiful beaches.

✓ My hometown is located in the southern part of Myanmar, called Cortana, which has so many beautiful beaches.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing articles. 'South and part of' should be 'the southern part of'. 'Yanmar' is a misspelling of 'Myanmar'. 'Have' should be 'has' to agree with the singular subject 'Cortana'. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× My hometown is located in South and part of. Yanmar is called Cortana, which have so many beautiful beaches.

✓ My hometown is located in the southern part of Myanmar, called Cortana, which has so many beautiful beaches.

The relative clause 'which have so many beautiful beaches' refers to 'Cortana', a singular noun, so the verb should be 'has' not 'have' to maintain subject-verb agreement.

× My favorite part of my hunter is up there have many hills and beaches and I love them. Nature. So that was very suitable for me to live there.

✓ My favorite part of my hometown is up there; it has many hills and beaches, and I love the nature. So, it was very suitable for me to live there.

'Hunter' is likely a typo for 'hometown'. The phrase 'up there have many hills' is incorrect; it should be 'it has many hills'. 'Them. Nature.' is fragmented and unclear; it is better to say 'I love the nature'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I left a there about 10 years now.

✓ I left there about 10 years ago.

The phrase 'left a there' is incorrect; 'a' is unnecessary. Also, 'now' is incorrect when referring to a past event; 'ago' is the correct adverb to indicate time in the past.

× Yeah, it is a good place for young people, but I recommend this dear. Other city for Isabelle young girl at the city for education and and also. Add I want to live a young people to hear for the application.

✓ Yeah, it is a good place for young people, but I recommend another city for young girls for education. Also, I want young people to live here for opportunities.

The original sentence contains unclear and incorrect pronouns and words such as 'this dear', 'Isabelle young girl', and 'hear for the application'. These are likely mistranslations or typos. Replacing them with 'another city for young girls for education' and clarifying the last sentence improves meaning and grammatical correctness.