Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh những câu không hoàn chỉnh và lỗi ngữ pháp, đồng thời sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và chính xác hơn. Hãy tập trung trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể, tránh lặp lại hoặc dùng từ không đúng ngữ cảnh.

例: My hometown is located in the southern part of Vietnam. It used to be a quiet place with few visitors, but recently it has developed many tourist attractions that draw more people.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời trở nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Hãy tránh những câu bị ngắt quãng và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác. Ngoài ra, nên bổ sung thêm chi tiết cụ thể về những điều bạn thích để câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

例: I really like the gardens in my hometown because they have a variety of fruits such as mangoes, dragon fruits, and star fruits. I also enjoy going there to catch crabs with my family.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần được tổ chức tốt hơn với câu chủ đề rõ ràng và các chi tiết hỗ trợ liên kết mạch lạc. Tránh các câu ngắt quãng và sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn.

例: I was born in my hometown but raised in another city. However, whenever I have the chance, I go back to visit my relatives and enjoy the gardens where I can catch crabs.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện phát âm và ngữ pháp để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn. Hãy sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và từ vựng phù hợp để diễn đạt ý tưởng. Ngoài ra, nên giải thích rõ hơn tại sao nơi đó tốt cho người trẻ.

例: Of course, my hometown is a good place for young people because it is quiet and peaceful. They can enjoy a calm environment away from the busy city life.

× Oh no, it used to be a quiet place that fewer visitor come too.

✓ Oh no, it used to be a quiet place that fewer visitors came to.

The noun 'visitor' should be plural 'visitors' to agree with 'fewer', and the verb 'come' should be in past tense 'came' to match 'used to be'.

× Oh no, it used to be a quiet place that fewer visitor come too.

✓ Oh no, it used to be a quiet place that fewer visitors came to.

The preposition 'too' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'to' indicating direction or place.

× Nowadays, it has recently developed with a variety of destination which attracts visitors.

✓ Nowadays, it has recently developed with a variety of destinations which attract visitors.

The noun 'destination' should be plural 'destinations' to match 'a variety of', and the verb 'attracts' should be plural 'attract' to agree with the plural subject.

× I'm really into the gardens. There are a variety of fruit like mango, dragon fruit or. Star Fruit and I'm also.

✓ I'm really into the gardens. There are a variety of fruits like mango, dragon fruit, or star fruit, and I'm also.

The noun 'fruit' should be plural 'fruits' when referring to different types, and punctuation is corrected for clarity.

× Enjoy that range where? Grab living there.

✓ I enjoy that range where I live. We can go to catch crabs there.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear; it is corrected to a complete and coherent sentence.

× It is only my hometown I was born in, raised in another city, but whenever I have a chance, I go back.

✓ It is only my hometown where I was born; I was raised in another city, but whenever I have a chance, I go back.

Added 'where' for clarity and separated clauses properly; 'was born' and 'was raised' are past tense verbs correctly used.

× And visit all my relatives. And I also. Go to visit the gardens in that range to catch the crab.

✓ I visit all my relatives, and I also go to visit the gardens in that area to catch crabs.

Combined fragmented sentences into a coherent sentence and corrected 'range' to 'area' for natural expression.

× And I also. Go to visit the gardens in that range to catch the crab.

✓ And I also go to visit the gardens in that area to catch crabs.

'Crab' should be plural 'crabs' when referring to catching multiple crabs.

× Of course it is like I mentioned before. It, uh, quite a place with. Play asmus fear an.

✓ Of course it is, like I mentioned before. It is quite a place with plenty of amusements.

Corrected fragmented and unclear sentence to a coherent one; 'play asmus fear an' is corrected to 'plenty of amusements'.

× We can stay away from the bustle and hustle city.

✓ We can stay away from the bustling and hustling city.

'Bustle and hustle' are nouns; to describe the city, the adjectives 'bustling' and 'hustling' are used.