Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear and direct response by stating the name and location of your hometown, and mention how long you have lived there in a simple sentence.

例: My hometown is Pullur, which is located in District Morgan. I have lived there since my childhood.

提案: Your answer lists facilities but lacks linking words and specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas and add more specific examples to make your answer more natural and effective.

例: I like my hometown because it has many facilities, such as a reliable water supply, a beautiful public park where people can relax, and good public transport that makes commuting easy.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Provide a simple and direct answer stating the duration you have lived there, using correct grammar.

例: I have lived in my hometown since I was a child.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Use linking words and correct grammar to explain why your hometown is good for young people, giving specific reasons.

例: Definitely, my hometown is a great place for young people because it has gyms and playgrounds. Moreover, many young people are attracted to invest in the local environment.

× I live from my since childhood.

✓ I have lived here since my childhood.

The phrase 'live from my since childhood' is incorrect. The correct preposition to indicate the starting point of an action continuing to the present is 'since'. Also, 'live' should be in present perfect tense to express an action continuing from the past to now. Hence, 'I have lived here since my childhood' is correct.

× There are many facilities that are provided in my hometown like water facility, public park and transport facility.

✓ There are many facilities provided in my hometown, like water supply, public parks, and transport facilities.

The phrase 'like water facility' is incorrect; it should be 'like water supply' or 'water facilities'. Also, 'public park' should be plural if referring to more than one, and 'transport facility' should be plural as well. The preposition 'in' is correct here.

× Since from my childhood I lived there and I I my my mother given me but to me at deer.

✓ I have lived there since my childhood, and my mother gave it to me when I was young.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Since from my childhood' is incorrect; 'since my childhood' is correct. The phrase 'I I my my mother given me but to me at deer' is nonsensical and needs to be rewritten for clarity and grammar. The corrected sentence uses present perfect tense to indicate duration and simple past for the action of the mother giving.

× Definitely my hometown is a very good place for younger people becauses it also include gym and playground an younger people already invite their investment environment.

✓ Definitely, my hometown is a very good place for young people because it also includes a gym and playground, and young people are already investing in their environment.

The word 'younger' is incorrectly used; 'young' is the correct adjective here. 'Becauses' is a misspelling of 'because'. The verb 'include' should be 'includes' to agree with singular subject 'it'. The phrase 'an younger people' is incorrect; 'a gym and playground' is correct. The phrase 'already invite their investment environment' is unclear and corrected to 'are already investing in their environment' for clarity and grammar.