Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and direct, which is good. To improve, you could add a bit more detail to make your response more engaging and informative, such as mentioning a notable feature or characteristic of Seoul.

例: My hometown is Seoul, the capital city of South Korea, known for its vibrant culture and modern skyscrapers.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains some confusing words and phrases. To improve, focus on using clear and relevant vocabulary, avoid redundancy, and organize your ideas logically with linking words. Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question.

例: I like that my hometown offers a wide range of activities, such as shopping, hiking, and water sports, because it has diverse natural landscapes and modern facilities.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains hesitations and unclear phrases. To improve, try to speak more fluently and clearly, use simple and correct sentences, and provide specific details about your living experience.

例: I have lived in my hometown for about 20 years. Although my family moved several times within the city, I have spent most of my life there.

提案: Your answer addresses the question and provides contrasting opinions, which is good. To improve, try to organize your ideas more clearly using linking words, correct grammar, and avoid hesitations for better fluency.

例: Some people think my hometown is great for young people because it offers many activities and learning opportunities. However, others feel it can be too competitive academically, which worries some parents.

× Well in my hometown you can do what ever possibly you can imagine such as ledgers, boards. Killings, shopping, climbing, hiking. Water sports everything because it has hardly ever the biggest lever.

✓ Well, in my hometown you can do whatever you can possibly imagine such as sledges, boards, kayaking, shopping, climbing, hiking, water sports, everything because it has almost every kind of leisure activity.

The original sentence contains incorrect quantifiers and word choices such as 'what ever possibly' and 'hardly ever the biggest lever' which are unclear and incorrect. 'Whatever you can possibly imagine' is the correct phrase. Also, 'ledgers' and 'killings' seem to be incorrect words likely intended as 'sledges' and 'kayaking'. 'Hardly ever the biggest lever' is incorrect; it should be 'almost every kind of leisure activity' to express the abundance of activities. Correct quantifier usage improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× About 20 years in quiet. It's a, it's a, it's like my whole life. I have been living in 1000 area ordinaria quite everywhere because my family has moved many times.

✓ About 20 years in quiet. It's like my whole life. I have been living in the same area quite everywhere because my family has moved many times.

The phrase 'I have been living in 1000 area ordinaria quite everywhere' is unclear and likely incorrect. The correction assumes the intended meaning is 'I have been living in the same area quite everywhere' or similar. Also, 'It's a, it's a' is redundant and removed. The use of present perfect continuous 'have been living' is correct to indicate an action continuing up to now. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I'm Some people say yes, but some could say no because it's similar to New York.

✓ Some people say yes, but some could say no because it's similar to New York.

The phrase 'I'm Some people say yes' is incorrect because 'I'm' (I am) is improperly used before 'Some people'. Removing 'I'm' corrects the pronoun misuse and makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× But it's too competitive in school, so some parents say no it when it comes to the study an education.

✓ But it's too competitive in school, so some parents say no when it comes to study and education.

The phrase 'say no it' is incorrect; 'it' is unnecessary and incorrect here. Also, 'the study an education' should be 'study and education' without the definite article 'the' before 'study' and correcting 'an' to 'and'. Removing the unnecessary pronoun and correcting articles improves sentence clarity and correctness.