Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Please provide a clear and direct response stating the name and location of your hometown. Keep it natural and concise.

例: My hometown is Inven Job, which is a small city located near Pin Job.

提案: Your answer has good points but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about what makes your hometown peaceful and friendly.

例: My hometown is a small city located near Pin Job. I like it because it is peaceful, and the people are very friendly, which makes it a great place to live.

提案: Your answer is mostly clear but could be improved by correcting grammar and making it more natural. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I have lived in my hometown for 15 years. Since I grew up there and my family still lives there, I have stayed here all this time.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas clearly using linking words and provide specific examples of opportunities for young people in your hometown.

例: Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because it has many sports colleges and good hospitals. There are also many opportunities for education and personal growth.

× Inven job is still under city.

✓ Inven job is still within the city.

The preposition 'under' is incorrectly used here. When referring to a location inside a city, 'within' or 'in' is appropriate. 'Under' implies a position beneath something physically, which is not suitable in this context.

× My hometown is small city located near Pin job.

✓ My hometown is a small city located near Pin job.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'small city'. Also, 'small city' is singular, so it needs the article 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× It is no faults, peacefully and friendly people which makes it great place to live.

✓ It has no faults, peaceful and friendly people, which makes it a great place to live.

'No faults' should be preceded by 'has' to indicate possession. 'Peacefully' is an adverb but should be the adjective 'peaceful' to describe 'people'. Also, 'great place' needs the article 'a' before it.

× I have lived in my state for 15 years now. It's where I grew up and where my family still lives, so I stay here all this time.

✓ I have lived in my state for 15 years now. It's where I grew up and where my family still lives, so I have stayed here all this time.

The phrase 'I stay here all this time' is incorrect because it refers to a duration up to the present. The present perfect tense 'have stayed' is appropriate to express an action continuing until now.

× Yes it is hometown is a good place for young peoples for their studies and forded hospital also for young and old but in for young peoples they have many sports colleges in there my city and there are many opportunities in my city.

✓ Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people for their studies and has good hospitals for both young and old. For young people, there are many sports colleges in my city and many opportunities.

'Peoples' is incorrect; the plural of 'people' is 'people'. 'Fording hospital' is incorrect; it should be 'good hospitals'. The sentence structure is confusing and needs to be broken into clearer sentences. Also, 'in there my city' is incorrect; it should be 'in my city'.