Hometown— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer provides relevant information but contains some language errors and redundancy. Try to correct pronunciation mistakes (e.g., 'seeing' should be 'in'), avoid unnecessary details like 'and it is cold' without elaboration, and use correct names (e.g., 'Confucius' instead of 'Cone Confusions'). Also, keep the answer concise and natural.

例: My hometown is in Shandong Province, located in northeast China. It is famous as the birthplace of the great philosopher Confucius.

提案: Your answer includes good points but lacks clarity and coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas, correct grammar mistakes, and be more specific. For example, explain what you mean by 'very distinct' weather and clarify the characteristics of the people.

例: I like many things about my hometown. For example, the weather is very distinct because it has four clear seasons. Also, I enjoy Qingdao beer, which is famous there. Moreover, the people are very friendly and sincere, although sometimes they can be a bit direct.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but has some grammatical errors and hesitations. Try to form complete sentences and avoid filler words like 'Uhm'. Also, connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I lived there until I was seven years old. Then, I moved to Guangdong Province with my parents, where I started my primary school education.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains hesitations and unclear phrases like 'pretty. Come.' Improve fluency by practicing speaking without pauses and use clearer vocabulary. Also, provide more specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

例: I think it depends on the person. For ambitious young people, my hometown might not be ideal because the job market is not very competitive, which limits career opportunities.

× My hometown is seeing Shandong Province, located in the northeast of China, and it is cold.

✓ My hometown is in Shandong Province, located in the northeast of China, and it is cold.

The verb 'seeing' is incorrectly used here. The correct preposition to indicate location is 'in'. 'Is seeing' suggests an ongoing action, which is not appropriate for describing a static location.

× I like many things about my hometown, like the weather, very distinct, Four Seasons and the Qingdao beer, an I like the people there very direct and the friendly, a little bit rude maybe while they are sincere.

✓ I like many things about my hometown, like the weather, which is very distinct with four seasons, and the Qingdao beer. I also like the people there; they are very direct and friendly, maybe a little bit rude, but sincere.

The original sentence has incorrect adjective and adverb usage and lacks proper sentence structure. 'Very distinct, Four Seasons' is unclear; it should be 'which is very distinct with four seasons'. 'An I like' is a typo and should be 'and I like'. 'The friendly' should be 'friendly'. The sentence is also run-on and needs to be split for clarity.

× I have lived there until I was seven years old. Uhm. At that time, I moved to Guangdong province with my parents. And the start my. Primary school education.

✓ I lived there until I was seven years old. At that time, I moved to Guangdong province with my parents and started my primary school education.

The present perfect tense 'have lived' is incorrect when referring to a finished period in the past. Simple past 'lived' is appropriate. 'And the start my.' is incomplete and should be corrected to 'and started my' to form a proper sentence.

× I think it depends. For ambitious young people, I don't think it's a suitable place for them to live or work because the job market is pretty. Come. Not competitive enough for them. Uh.

✓ I think it depends. For ambitious young people, I don't think it's a suitable place for them to live or work because the job market is pretty calm and not competitive enough for them.

The word 'Come' is a mispronunciation or typo and should be 'calm'. The sentence is fragmented and needs to be combined for clarity. 'Pretty calm and not competitive enough' correctly describes the job market.