Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and informative. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a brief reason or detail. Avoid self-conscious phrases like “although I'm not young” that don't add useful information unless you expand on it. Keep it within 1–2 sentences and use linking words if you add detail.

例: I'm currently a student. I'm studying English here in Dublin because I want to improve my language skills for future work opportunities.

提案: Clarify the meaning and use correct tense and vocabulary. Answer directly (where you work or if you don't work) then add a brief explanation of your situation using coherent linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like “I must cheered”.

例: I don't have a formal job at the moment; I recently moved to Dublin and I'm studying English here, so my main focus is on classes rather than work.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and specific reasons with better vocabulary and linking words. Mention concrete benefits (job opportunities, flexible hours, supportive environment) and use one or two supporting details. Avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I think Dublin is a good place to work. For example, there are many part-time jobs suitable for students and flexible schedules that let people combine work and study.

提案: Answer more directly and organize the sentence: state whether you would like the workplace, then give specific reasons using linking words. Use correct verbs and noun phrases (e.g., work in a café, comfortable atmosphere, flexible hours).

例: Yes, I would like to work in a café because the relaxed atmosphere helps me concentrate, and cafés often offer flexible hours that suit my study schedule.

提案: Give a clear main sentence about uncertainty, then add a specific possibility with reasons and linking words. Use past tense correctly and more precise vocabulary (e.g., I used to work in fashion / I have experience in the fashion industry).

例: I'm not sure about my exact plans yet, but I used to work in the fashion industry, so I might look for a job at a fashion company in the future because I enjoy design and styling.

× Now I'm a student, although I'm not young.

✓ I am a student now, although I am not young.

Use consistent present simple or present continuous for states. 'Now I'm a student' is acceptable but repositioning 'now' improves natural word order. Also expand contraction for formality if needed; keep present simple 'I am not young' to describe a general state.

× I must cheered until now and I moved to Dublin recently and then I'm learning English in Dublin.

✓ I have been cheering until now, I moved to Dublin recently, and now I'm learning English in Dublin.

Original uses 'must cheered' which mixes modal 'must' with a past participle incorrectly. If the speaker means an action continuing until now, present perfect continuous 'have been cheering' or present perfect 'have cheered' is appropriate. Also add commas and 'now' for clearer sequence. Ensure verb forms match intended meaning.

× Is it a good place to work?

✓ Is it a good place to work?

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed.

× I think so. Now I'm living in Dublin. It's a good place to work because people, student students can work here and also they can study both.

✓ I think so. I am now living in Dublin. It's a good place to work because people and students can both work and study here.

Original has repetition 'student students' and awkward word order 'they can study both'. Combine 'people and students' and place 'both' before verbs for correct parallel structure: 'both work and study'. Use consistent present continuous 'I am now living' if emphasizing current residence.

× I would like to walk in the cafe which makes me feel comfortable to study and work and flexible schedules.

✓ I would like to work in a cafe that makes me feel comfortable to study and has flexible hours.

Original 'walk in the cafe' likely meant 'work in a cafe'; 'which' can be replaced by 'that' for defining clauses; 'flexible schedules' should relate to the cafe 'has flexible hours'. Use 'a cafe' (indefinite article) unless a specific cafe is meant.

× I'm not sure yet but before I walked in fashion industry, so maybe in the future I would like to work in fashion company.

✓ I'm not sure yet, but before I worked in the fashion industry, so maybe in the future I would like to work for a fashion company.

Use past simple 'worked' to describe previous employment. Add 'the' before 'fashion industry'. Use 'work for a fashion company' or 'work in a fashion company' with article 'a'. Remove extra commas and adjust word order for clarity.