Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は明確で情報量もあり自然ですが、文の流れをより滑らかにし、語彙の重複を避けることでさらに良くなります。例えば“architecture design firm”は“architectural firm”とする、また“large scale buildings”は“large-scale developments”などの表現に言い換えられます。回答は1〜2文にまとめ、不要な繰り返しを減らしてください。

例: I work as an architect at an architectural firm in Tokyo. I primarily design large-scale developments, including hotel towers, office complexes and mixed-use projects.

提案: 内容は十分ですが文法と語順の修正が必要です（“for finding”→“to find”）。また、情報を簡潔にまとめて文の数を抑え、接続表現を自然に使ってください。現在と過去の対比を1〜2文でまとめると良いです。

例: I currently work in Tokyo, although I lived and worked in Osaka for over seven years. I moved here around two years ago to find new professional opportunities.

提案: 全体の意味は伝わりますが、いくつかの語彙と表現が不自然です（“I feel so”→“I think so”や“surrounding conditionals”は不適切）。また、文のつながりを示す接続詞を使い、具体例で裏付けると説得力が増します。文を2〜3文に整理してください。

例: Yes, I think it's a great place to work. Tokyo's stunning buildings and many parks inspire my designs, and the pleasant surroundings help me relax and stay focused.

提案: 冒頭の表現が不自然です（“I like the progress”は意味不明）。代わりに“the place”や“my workplace”を使い、理由を簡潔に述べてください。支持説明は具体的で良いので、接続詞で流れを整え、文を短めにまとめましょう。

例: Yes, I like my workplace a lot. My office has a large window overlooking a river and trees, which helps me relax and stay calm, so I can concentrate even during busy periods.

提案: 意図は明確ですが、幾つかの文法の誤り（“in the other countries”→“other countries”、“help me”→“will help me”あるいは“would help me”）と冗長表現を直してください。目的や期待する具体的な効果を一文で述べると良いです。

例: I currently work in the global design department, and in the future I'd like to work abroad because collaborating with international colleagues will enhance my skills and broaden my creative perspective.

× I moved to Tokyo about two years ago for finding new professional opportunities.

✓ I moved to Tokyo about two years ago to find new professional opportunities.

The verb 'for' + -ing is incorrect after 'moved ... to'. Use an infinitive of purpose (to + base verb) to express reason. Change 'for finding' to 'to find'.

× The surrounding conditionals always help me improve my design inspirations and feel relaxed.

✓ The surrounding conditions always help inspire my designs and make me feel relaxed.

'Conditionals' is the wrong word; use 'conditions'. 'Improve my design inspirations' is awkward — use 'inspire my designs' or 'improve my design ideas'. Also parallel structure requires 'help inspire' and 'make me feel relaxed' rather than mixing forms.

× Yes, I like the progress where I work.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work.

'Progress' is incorrect meaning; the speaker means 'place'. Use 'the place' with the definite article to refer to the workplace.

× In the future, I would like to work in the other countries because collaborating with people from other countries help me enhance my design skills and broaden my creative perspective.

✓ In the future, I would like to work in other countries because collaborating with people from other countries helps me enhance my design skills and broaden my creative perspective.

Use 'in other countries' not 'in the other countries'. Also subject-verb agreement: 'collaborating ... helps' (singular gerund subject) so add 's'.

× ... collaborating with people from other countries help me enhance my design skills ...

✓ ... collaborating with people from other countries helps me enhance my design skills ...

The gerund phrase 'collaborating with people from other countries' functions as a singular subject, so the verb should be 'helps' not 'help'.