Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct tense usage. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (role, years) using correct grammar and varied vocabulary. Avoid repetition like “I am currently working” and “I worked there” which conflicts in tense.

例: I work as a government chemist and have been in this role for nearly nine years. In my job I head the laboratory, where I supervise tests and mentor junior staff, which I find very rewarding.

提案: Answer clearly and avoid unclear fragments. Give a concise main sentence describing the workplace, then add one specific detail (location or commute) linked with a linking phrase. Remove odd words (e.g., stray name) and correct the time expression.

例: I work at a government laboratory in Samarina City. It’s about a nine- to ten-minute commute from my home, which makes the travel quite convenient.

提案: Provide a clear reasoned answer with improved fluency and fewer fillers. Start with a direct opinion, then give two specific reasons linked by connectors (because, and) and use consistent tense. Avoid filler words like “uh.”

例: Yes, it’s a good place to work because I have been there for nearly nine years and have built a strong reputation as the laboratory head. In addition, I enjoy good relationships with my colleagues, which makes the workplace friendly and supportive.

提案: Give a direct answer followed by concise, specific reasons using linking words. Remove hesitation sounds and finish incomplete sentences. Mention a couple of clear benefits (less traffic, peaceful neighborhood) and explain briefly why they matter.

例: Yes, I do. Because I work in a provincial area, there is much less traffic than in the city and the neighborhood is peaceful, which makes my daily commute less stressful and my life more relaxed.

提案: Use a confident, structured response: state your plan, give a short reason and a realistic outcome. Avoid hesitations and use correct verb forms (master’s degree). Specify timeline or steps if possible to add concreteness.

例: I plan to pursue a master’s degree to qualify for higher positions within the department. After completing my studies, I hope to apply for senior roles and eventually become head of our division.

× I am currently working so I am a government employee and I worked there for almost 9 years.

✓ I am currently working as a government employee and I have worked there for almost nine years.

The sentence mixes present continuous ('I am currently working') with a simple past ('I worked there') although the action continues to the present. Use present perfect ('have worked') to show an action that began in the past and continues now. Also use 'working as a government employee' to express role. Spell out 'nine' in formal speech. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× So I am a chemist by profession.

✓ So I am a chemist by profession.

No grammatical correction needed for tense, but ensure simple present 'am' correctly links the subject and noun complement. This sentence is acceptable as is; no -ing form is required. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× As I mentioned, I am working in a government office, so it's a nine to 10 minutes away from home and it is located in the Samarina City. Kavita.

✓ As I mentioned, I work in a government office; it is nine to ten minutes away from my home and is located in Samarina City, Kavita.

Use simple present 'I work' for habitual action. Use 'nine to ten minutes' (spell out numbers in formal speech) and 'away from my home' for correct possessive. Remove the extra article before 'Samarina City' (proper names usually do not need 'the'). Also integrate the name 'Kavita' properly with a comma. Problem mainly involves prepositions and article use. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Yes, I must say yes because I've been working there for almost 9 years.

✓ Yes, I must say so because I have been working there for almost nine years.

Use 'so' instead of repeating 'yes' for natural response. 'I've been working' (present perfect continuous) is correct to show ongoing action; spell out 'nine'. The main issue is word choice rather than tense. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× I have established my reputation as a laboratory head and I have, uh, made friends with them and I enjoyed working in our company.

✓ I have established my reputation as the laboratory head, I have made friends with my colleagues, and I enjoy working at our company.

Maintain consistent tense: use present perfect or present for ongoing states ('have established', 'have made', 'enjoy'). Replace vague pronoun 'them' with 'my colleagues'. Use 'the laboratory head' if it's a specific role. Use 'at' for company employment. The original mixed present perfect and past simple ('enjoyed') which incorrectly implies enjoyment ended. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Yes, definitely. Uh, I am working in a province and the traffic compared to the city is very little and I like uh, the. The neighborhood here, it's peaceful.

✓ Yes, definitely. I work in a province, and the traffic is much lighter compared to the city. I like the neighborhood here; it is peaceful.

Use simple present 'I work' for habitual actions. 'Traffic is much lighter' is a more natural comparative phrase than 'very little'. Remove filler words and fix sentence fragments ('the. The neighborhood'). Combine into clear sentences and use 'it is' or 'it's' consistently. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× I am trying to get my masters degree so that I can apply for a much higher position in the future and eventually I will become uh, the head of our uh division.

✓ I am trying to get my master's degree so that I can apply for a much higher position in the future, and eventually I hope to become the head of our division.

Use 'master's degree' with an apostrophe. 'I am trying to get' (present continuous) is fine for current plans. Replace 'I will become' with 'I hope to become' to sound more natural and realistic about future ambitions. Remove filler 'uh' and extra article before 'division'. Grammar problem type ID: 7