Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 질문에 직접 답한 뒤 추가 정보를 더 구조적으로 제시하세요. 예컨대 첫 문장에서 현재 상태(학생임)를 명확히 간결히 말하고, 두 번째 문장에서 이유와 목표를 구체적으로 연결하세요. 문장이 다소 길고 시제 사용이 일관되지 않으니 현재형·미래형을 구분해 표현을 다듬으세요.

例: I am currently a student. I study English every day to prepare for living abroad because I want to enroll at a university in Australia and improve my academic English.

提案: 질문을 오해한 듯 짧게 'Work.'라고만 답한 부분을 고치세요. 먼저 장소(예: a café)를 명확히 답하고, 그 다음 이유를 연결어로 매끄럽게 설명하세요. 구문은 자연스럽고 문장 수를 2~3개로 유지하세요.

例: I usually work at a café near my house. It's a quiet environment, so I can concentrate on studying and doing homework.

提案: 좋은 응답입니다. 더 자연스럽게 연결하려면 중복된 이유(so quiet / so I can)를 정리하고 하나의 연결구문으로 통합하세요. 또한 구체적인 예시(몇 시간, 빈도)를 더하면 신빙성이 높아집니다.

例: Yes, it's a great place to work because it's very quiet, which helps me concentrate. I usually go there for two to three hours when I need to focus on English writing, and the good coffee is an added bonus.

提案: 'Would you like'의 의미는 보통 선호 여부를 묻는 것이므로 현재 좋아하는지와 이유를 간결히 말하세요. 표현이 반복적(helps me concentrate / comfortable to study)이므로 하나로 묶어 구체적 묘사(예: 조명, 의자)로 풍부하게 하세요.

例: Yes, I like it because it has a pleasant interior and comfortable chairs, so I can concentrate on my studies for long periods.

提案: 계획을 잘 설명했지만 'work plans'라는 질문에는 경력 목표나 학업이 어떻게 직업으로 연결되는지 간단히 언급하면 더 적절합니다. 또한 'in there'는 불필요하니 삭제하세요.

例: Next year I will enroll at the University of Sydney to study pharmacy. After graduating, I hope to work in a hospital pharmacy or a research lab, because I am interested in biology and chemistry.

× I graduate from high school and now I study English every day to prepare for living abroad.

✓ I graduated from high school and now I study English every day to prepare for living abroad.

The action of finishing high school happened in the past, so the verb should be in the past tense 'graduated' rather than the present 'graduate'. Use past tense for completed actions: 'I graduated from high school.' Suggestion: Use past simple for completed past events (I graduated).

× Work. I often study English and do my homework at a cafe near my house.

✓ I often study English and do my homework at a cafe near my house.

The single-word response 'Work.' is an incomplete sentence and does not answer the examiner's question clearly. It should be removed or replaced with a full sentence. Suggestion: Give a full sentence that states your situation, e.g. 'I don't work; I study.' or simply answer the question directly with a complete sentence.

× I like going there because it's quiet to concentrate.

✓ I like going there because it's quiet and I can concentrate.

The phrase 'quiet to concentrate' is ungrammatical. Use a linking structure: 'quiet and I can concentrate' or 'quiet, which helps me concentrate.' Suggestion: Join clauses correctly using 'and' or a relative clause to show purpose or result.

× Yes, it's a great place to work because it's so quiet, so I can concentrate easily and they serve excellent coffee.

✓ Yes, it's a great place to study because it's so quiet, so I can concentrate easily and they serve excellent coffee.

The student previously said they study rather than work at the cafe. Using 'place to work' is inconsistent; 'place to study' matches context. Also 'they' is acceptable for the cafe staff, but maintain consistent vocabulary. Suggestion: Use consistent nouns that reflect your activity (study vs work).

× Yes I do because my workplace has beautiful interior and helps me concentrate easily.

✓ Yes I do because my workplace has a beautiful interior and helps me concentrate easily.

Missing article 'a' before 'beautiful interior' makes the phrase ungrammatical. 'Interior' here needs a determiner. Suggestion: Use 'a' with singular countable nouns: 'a beautiful interior.'

× Also it is comfortable to study.

✓ Also, it is comfortable to study there.

Sentence is understandable but sounds incomplete; adding 'there' clarifies location. Also a comma after 'Also' improves flow. Suggestion: Include the location to make the sentence complete: 'it is comfortable to study there.'

× In the next year, I will enroll at the University of Sydney and major in pharmacy.

✓ Next year, I will enroll at the University of Sydney and major in pharmacy.

'In the next year' is not wrong but 'Next year' is more natural. The future tense 'will enroll' is appropriate for planned future actions. Suggestion: Prefer 'Next year' for natural speech: 'Next year, I will enroll...'. Also 'major in pharmacy' is correct.

× I'm really, really excited to study in there because I'm interested in biology and chemistry.

✓ I'm really, really excited to study there because I'm interested in biology and chemistry.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary before 'there'. Use 'study there' rather than 'study in there'. Suggestion: Remove the extra preposition: 'study there.'