Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, ngắn gọn (1-2 câu), ngữ pháp và phát âm đúng hơn. Tránh lặp từ, chỉnh lại thì và trật tự từ. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp (I am a student) rồi nêu chi tiết cụ thể (tên trường, cấp học, tình trạng chuẩn bị thi đại học). Ví dụ cụ thể giúp làm rõ ý.

例: I am a student. I study at Human Too Secondary School, which is one of the most well-known schools in my country, and I am currently preparing for university entrance exams.

提案: Trả lời cần ngắn gọn trực tiếp (I don't work) và tránh phủ định kép. Thêm một hoặc hai câu hỗ trợ nêu hoạt động hiện tại và lý do cụ thể. Dùng liên từ hợp lý (so, because) để kết nối ý.

例: I don't work at the moment; I am a full-time student. I study subjects like math and English every day because I believe they will help me pursue a better career.

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, tránh mâu thuẫn và sửa lỗi từ vựng (can't → can). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (Yes/No or I think) rồi giải thích cụ thể với ví dụ hoặc lý do. Dùng liên từ như because, for example.

例: I think working in a city centre would be good because there are more job opportunities and generally higher salaries. For example, many companies and businesses are based in cities, which makes it easier to find work.

提案: Cần tránh tiếng ồ ừ (uh) và nói rõ, ngắn gọn: nêu nơi bạn muốn làm việc và lý do cụ thể (gần nhà, nhiều cơ hội, lương cao). Sử dụng cấu trúc rõ ràng và từ vựng chính xác (near my home, higher salary).

例: Yes, I would like to work in the city centre, especially Hanoi, because it is close to my home and offers more job opportunities and higher salaries.

提案: Cần câu chủ đề rõ ràng (My future plan is...), dùng thì đúng và sửa lỗi trật tự từ. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về lý do và cách bạn sẽ đạt được mục tiêu (học diễn xuất, tham gia câu lạc bộ). Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu và dùng linking words (because, since, so) hợp lý.

例: My future plan is to become a famous actor because I have loved watching films, especially comedies and romantic movies, since childhood. To achieve this, I plan to study acting, join local theatre groups, and audition for roles.

× Well, I'm still a student in I study in human too secondary school which is famous school in my country.

✓ Well, I'm still a student; I study at Huan Tau Secondary School, which is a famous school in my country.

The original sentence has several structure and article errors: incorrect preposition 'in' before the clause, wrong word order, and missing articles. Use a semicolon or separate sentences to join independent clauses. Use 'study at' for institutions and include the definite/indefinite article 'a' before 'famous school'. Also correct the school name spelling if needed.

× Nearly I half an university entrance it seemed.

✓ I am almost halfway through university entrance preparation, it seems.

This sentence has incorrect word order and missing auxiliary verbs. 'Nearly I half' is ungrammatical; use 'I am almost halfway through' to express progress. Include 'preparation' to clarify meaning and 'it seems' as a separate clause or appended with a comma.

× No, I am just a student in I didn't not work anything.

✓ No, I am just a student; I don't work anywhere.

The original mixes tenses and pronouns incorrectly. Use contraction 'don't' for present negative and 'anywhere' (not 'anything') with intransitive 'work'. Remove the unnecessary 'in' and double negative 'didn't not'.

× And I need study math and English subject every day.

✓ And I need to study math and English every day.

After 'need' use the infinitive 'to study'. 'English subject' is redundant; 'English' suffices. Place 'every day' at the end for natural word order.

× This make me have better career path.

✓ This will help me have a better career path.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'This make' should be 'This will help' or 'This makes' depending on meaning. Use 'a better career path' with the article 'a'. 'Help me have' is clearer than 'make me have'.

× Well I am just a student but if I work in the future, I think a city center is a good place to work because in city center you have better job opportunity and people can't earn good salary.

✓ Well, I am just a student, but if I work in the future, I think the city center is a good place to work because in the city center you have better job opportunities and people can earn good salaries.

Use definite article 'the' before 'city center' when referring to a specific place. 'Job opportunity' should be plural 'job opportunities'. 'People can't earn good salary' is incorrect meaning; use 'can earn good salaries' to express possibility in general. Also punctuation and commas improve clarity.

× Uh, in the future, I want to work in the city center, uh, which is Hanoi because it's nearly my house and in Hanoi half better job opportunity and I can earn higher.

✓ In the future, I want to work in the city center, in Hanoi, because it is near my house and Hanoi has better job opportunities so I can earn a higher salary.

Problems: misplaced 'which is Hanoi' — use a clear phrase 'in Hanoi'. 'Nearly my house' should be 'near my house'. 'Half better' is incorrect; use 'has better job opportunities'. 'Earn higher' needs an object: 'earn a higher salary'.

× My future work playing is become a famous actor because since my childhood I very love watch movies especially comedy and romantics.

✓ My future plan is to become a famous actor because since my childhood I have loved watching movies, especially comedies and romantic films.

Many issues: 'work playing' unclear — use 'future plan'. Use 'to become' infinitive. Use present perfect 'have loved' to express continuing feeling since childhood. Verb 'love watch' should be 'love watching'. Use plural nouns 'comedies' and 'romantic films' for correct form.

× So I want to be a famous actor.

✓ So I want to be a famous actor.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Use of 'to be' infinitive fits the context.