Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh sử dụng từ không chính xác hoặc lặp lại không cần thiết. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sau đó bổ sung chi tiết hỗ trợ một cách logic và tự nhiên.

例: I am currently a senior student majoring in English at my university. Besides studying, I work part-time as a teaching assistant at an English language center, which helps me gain practical experience in language and communication.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời tự nhiên và chính xác hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc và thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn về nơi làm việc.

例: As I mentioned, I work part-time as a teaching assistant at a well-known English center in Danang. Working there has helped me improve my communication skills and gain valuable teaching experience.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng từ ngữ lặp lại và các tiếng ừ ừ không cần thiết. Hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể để làm rõ ý.

例: Yes, definitely. It is a dynamic and energetic environment that helps me improve my skills significantly. Moreover, working with young and active students motivates me to do my best every day.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý phát âm và ngữ pháp, đồng thời tránh lỗi từ vựng không chính xác. Hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc và cung cấp ví dụ rõ ràng, chính xác hơn.

例: Yes, of course. I enjoy working here because the center offers me opportunities to improve my professional skills and develop important soft skills like teamwork and communication. For example, I often participate in group projects, which enhances my collaboration abilities.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng câu trúc câu rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Hãy trình bày ý tưởng một cách mạch lạc, sử dụng các từ nối và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể để làm rõ kế hoạch tương lai.

例: As an English learner, I hope to become an English teacher in the future because I enjoy working with young and active children who motivate me to improve my teaching skills. I want to create fun and engaging lessons so that students can develop their language abilities confidently.

× Currently I'm a senior student at my university majoring in English and because I always weigh umm passing umm outsway passenger about languages and communication in addition to my study, I work part time at a dishing assistant at an English language center which help me get practical.

✓ Currently I'm a senior student at my university majoring in English and because I always weigh umm passing umm outsway passenger about languages and communication in addition to my study, I work part time as a teaching assistant at an English language center which helps me get practical experience.

The phrase 'a dishing assistant' is incorrect; it should be 'a teaching assistant' to match the intended meaning. Also, 'help me get practical' is incomplete and should be 'helps me get practical experience' to be grammatically correct and clear. The verb 'help' must agree with the singular subject 'center' as 'helps'. This is a singular and plural issue and subject-verb agreement.

× As I mentioned earlier, I work part time as a teachings assistant at boarding school which is a famous English center in Danang and working here have made to improve my communication skill and gain valuable experience in teaching.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I work part time as a teaching assistant at a boarding school which is a famous English center in Danang and working here has helped me improve my communication skills and gain valuable experience in teaching.

The phrase 'teachings assistant' should be 'teaching assistant' (adjective form). 'Working here have made to improve' is incorrect; it should be 'working here has helped me improve' to use the correct verb form and subject-verb agreement. 'Communication skill' should be plural 'communication skills' as it refers to general ability. This involves verb form and singular/plural issues.

× Yes, definitely. It's a very dynamic and energetic environment to help me improve my skills significantly. And I really enjoy working with your young and active student because, uh, they, umm, they motivate me, give me the motivation to do my best everyday.

✓ Yes, definitely. It's a very dynamic and energetic environment that helps me improve my skills significantly. And I really enjoy working with young and active students because they motivate me and give me the motivation to do my best every day.

'Your young and active student' is incorrect; it should be 'young and active students' to match plural and avoid incorrect possessive pronoun 'your'. Also, 'everyday' is an adjective meaning 'commonplace'; the correct phrase is 'every day' meaning 'each day'. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and adjectives.

× Yes, of course. I really enjoy working here because this center not only offer me the opportunity to improve my professional skill, but also help me develop important soft skills like teamwork or communication. For example, I often pass it, participate in Group projected, enhance my ability to recover.

✓ Yes, of course. I really enjoy working here because this center not only offers me the opportunity to improve my professional skills, but also helps me develop important soft skills like teamwork and communication. For example, I often participate in group projects to enhance my ability to recover.

'Offer' and 'help' should be 'offers' and 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'center'. 'Professional skill' should be plural 'professional skills'. 'Pass it' is unclear and likely incorrect; removed for clarity. 'Group projected' should be 'group projects'. 'Enhance my ability to recover' is unclear; likely intended to say 'enhance my ability to cooperate' or similar, but kept as 'recover' per original. This involves quantifier and verb agreement issues.

× As our English learner, I hope to become an English teacher in the future because I enjoy working with the young and active children uh, who uh, is by me to improve my teaching skill. I don't want to have them learn effectively by creating fun and engaging lesson so that they can develop their language ability confidently.

✓ As an English learner, I hope to become an English teacher in the future because I enjoy working with young and active children who help me improve my teaching skills. I want to help them learn effectively by creating fun and engaging lessons so that they can develop their language abilities confidently.

'As our English learner' should be 'As an English learner'. 'Who uh, is by me' is incorrect; should be 'who help me'. 'Teaching skill' should be plural 'teaching skills'. 'I don't want to have them learn effectively' is incorrect; should be 'I want to help them learn effectively'. 'Lesson' should be plural 'lessons'. 'Language ability' should be plural 'language abilities'. These are singular/plural and sentence structure errors.