Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и естественным. Следует начать с прямого ответа на вопрос, затем добавить конкретные детали, избегая излишней информации и грамматических ошибок.

例: I am currently a freshman student at Western University. I really enjoy being a student because I get discounts on public transportation and many other services in Warsaw.

提案: Ответ не ясен и содержит грамматические ошибки. Нужно четко и полно ответить на вопрос, используя связные предложения и правильную лексику.

例: I work as a manager at a tourism company where I organize tours for tourists and handle phone inquiries.

提案: Ответ содержит много ошибок и нечетко выражен. Следует использовать связные предложения, избегать пауз и неясных слов, а также объяснить причины, почему место работы хорошее.

例: Yes, I would definitely recommend working at this company because it helps you improve your skills and meet new people.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения. Нужно использовать правильные предлоги и более точные слова, а также связать предложения логично.

例: Yes, I like the place where I work because it is comfortable and located very close to downtown.

提案: Ответ неясен и содержит много пауз и ошибок. Следует четко сформулировать планы на будущее, используя связные предложения и правильную лексику.

例: In the future, I want to change my career and work in a different field that is not related to my current job. I am considering studying to gain the necessary skills.

× Currently I'm a student at Western University freshman, and it's really amazing being a student because you're getting a discount in here and Warsaw for public transportation and for almost everything when you go.

✓ Currently I'm a freshman student at Western University, and it's really amazing being a student because you get discounts here in Warsaw for public transportation and for almost everything when you go.

The phrase 'Western University freshman' is incorrectly ordered; 'freshman student' is the correct form. Also, 'you're getting a discount in here and Warsaw' is incorrect; it should be 'you get discounts here in Warsaw' to correctly express plural discounts and proper preposition use.

× I work at a touristic company as a manager and I select a tour for tourists and. Phone.

✓ I work at a tourist company as a manager, and I select tours for tourists and handle phone calls.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Touristic company' should be 'tourist company'. The phrase 'and. Phone.' is incomplete and needs to be connected properly to the sentence to clarify the meaning.

× For sure I, I would really recommend you to work this company and this job.

✓ For sure, I would really recommend you work at this company and take this job.

The modal verb 'would' is used correctly, but the phrase 'recommend you to work this company' is incorrect. The verb 'recommend' is followed by the base form without 'to' and requires the preposition 'at' before the company.

× If you really come call me connectable person and want, uh, improve some skills in this we will field.

✓ If you are a sociable person and want to improve some skills in this well field.

The phrase 'come call me connectable person' is incorrect and unclear. 'Connectable' is not the correct adjective; 'sociable' or 'friendly' would be appropriate. Also, 'we will field' is unclear and likely a mispronunciation or error; 'well field' or 'well-established field' might be intended.

× Uh, place where I work is really comfortable and it's located really near for downtown.

✓ The place where I work is really comfortable and it's located really near downtown.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used after 'near'. The correct preposition is omitted; 'near downtown' is the correct form.

× So yes, I really argument and it's a good place.

✓ So yes, I really agree and it's a good place.

The word 'argument' is incorrectly used; the correct word is 'agree' to express agreement.

× In the future, I umm, I really want to change my everyone to my place where I work and another field.

✓ In the future, I really want to change my job from my current workplace to another field.

The phrase 'change my everyone to my place where I work' is incorrect and unclear. 'Everyone' is the wrong pronoun; 'job' or 'position' is appropriate. Also, 'my place where I work' should be 'my current workplace'.

× It's not related with my currently workplace, uh, so I think about uh, studying the field I really want.

✓ It's not related to my current workplace, so I am thinking about studying the field I really want.

The preposition 'with' is incorrect after 'related'; the correct preposition is 'to'. Also, 'currently workplace' should be 'current workplace'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.