Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中有重复和填充词，影响流畅性。建议减少重复表达，避免使用“uh”、“umm”等填充词，使回答更自然简洁。

例: I graduated four months ago and am currently studying English intensively because I hope to have opportunities to visit other countries in the future.

提案: 回答较完整，但可以使用更多连接词使句子更连贯，同时增加具体细节以丰富内容。

例: I'm not working at the moment because I'm focusing on improving my English skills, which is important since I plan to study abroad in the future and want to be well prepared for that experience.

提案: 回答直接但略显简单。建议补充说明为什么没有工作经验，或者谈谈理想的工作环境，丰富内容。

例: I am not working currently, so I don't have personal experience with a workplace; however, I hope to work in a friendly and supportive environment in the future.

提案: 回答过于简短且重复之前内容。建议扩展回答，表达对理想工作环境的期望，使回答更丰富。

例: Since I am not working now, I can't say for sure, but I would like to work in a place that encourages learning and growth.

提案: 回答未完成且缺乏具体细节。建议完整表达想法，并提供更多关于未来职业选择的具体信息。

例: To be honest, I haven't made definite plans yet. Although I majored in English education, I don't want to become a teacher. Instead, I'm considering careers related to English, such as translation or working in international business.

× I'm studying uh, English hard because umm, I hope to have the opportunities to visit other countries in the future.

✓ I'm studying English hard because I hope to have the opportunity to visit other countries in the future.

这里“opportunities”应改为单数“opportunity”，因为后面没有具体说明多个机会，且通常表达“有机会”时用单数。

× Actually I'm currently not working so I don't have a personal experience with a place at the workplace.

✓ Actually, I'm currently not working so I don't have personal experience with a workplace.

“experience”前不需要冠词“a”，且“with a place at the workplace”表达不自然，改为“with a workplace”更符合英语习惯。

× Instead, I'm considering other career options related to English such as translation or.

✓ Instead, I'm considering other career options related to English, such as translation or interpretation.

句子末尾“or”后缺少内容，导致句子不完整，应补充完整的职业选项，保证句子结构完整。