Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating 'working' and improve sentence flow by combining ideas. Also, specify the company name correctly and use precise time expressions.

例: I'm a project coordinator at a building automation company called BAS. I've been working here for a year, and I have four years of experience in this field.

提案: Your answer is too brief and contains a possible typo ('BS' instead of 'BAS'). Try to provide a complete sentence with more details and correct the company name. Adding a linking phrase can improve coherence.

例: I work at BAS, a building automation company located in Hamilton, which specializes in smart building solutions.

提案: Avoid repeating the word 'comfortable' and filler words like 'uh'. Use varied vocabulary and combine sentences for a more natural and effective response.

例: Absolutely, it's a great place to work. The ambience is pleasant, and the supportive work environment makes it enjoyable.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be more natural by avoiding repetition and adding a linking phrase to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I really like my workplace because a comfortable and well-equipped environment significantly boosts my productivity and motivation.

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific reasons for your career change.

例: In the future, I don't plan to continue in project management because it's quite stressful. Instead, I'm considering obtaining a teaching license since teaching is more convenient and offers a better work-life balance.

× I have been working here since a year, but I have four years of experience in this field.

✓ I have been working here for a year, but I have four years of experience in this field.

The phrase 'since a year' is incorrect because 'since' is used with a specific point in time, not a duration. The correct preposition for durations is 'for'. Therefore, 'for a year' is the proper expression.

× I'm working in a BS company which is located in Hamilton.

✓ I work in a BAS company which is located in Hamilton.

When talking about regular employment or habitual actions, the simple present tense 'I work' is preferred over the present continuous 'I'm working'. Also, 'BS company' seems to be a typo; it should be 'BAS company' as mentioned earlier.

× The ambience and the work environment is also very, uh, comfortable.

✓ The ambience and the work environment are also very, uh, comfortable.

The subject consists of two items joined by 'and', which makes it plural. Therefore, the verb should be plural 'are' instead of singular 'is' to agree with the plural subject.

× Well for future, I definitely don't want to continue my profession into project management.

✓ Well, for the future, I definitely don't want to continue my profession in project management.

The phrase 'continue my profession into project management' is awkward. The correct preposition is 'in' to indicate the field of work. Also, adding 'the' before 'future' is necessary to specify the time frame.

× I'm thinking of having a teaching license because it's more convenient and uh, comfortable than having a job which is stressful.

✓ I'm thinking of getting a teaching license because it's more convenient and, uh, comfortable than having a job that is stressful.

The verb 'having' a license is less natural than 'getting' or 'obtaining' a license. Also, 'which' should be replaced with 'that' to introduce a defining relative clause describing the job.