Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by making it more natural and adding a bit more detail. Instead of 'doing a computer course', you could say 'I am currently studying a computer course at college.' This makes your answer sound more fluent and complete.

例: I am currently a student studying a computer course at college. I am focusing on learning programming and software development.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and lacks natural flow. You can answer directly and add a little explanation. For example, say 'I don't work at the moment because I am focusing on my studies.' This sounds more natural and informative.

例: I don't work at the moment because I am focusing on my studies to complete my computer course.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and does not address the question properly. You can politely clarify that you don't work yet and then express your opinion about a good workplace. For example, 'I am not working currently, but I think a good workplace should be friendly and supportive.'

例: I am not working currently, but I believe a good workplace should have a friendly environment and good opportunities for learning.

提案: Your answer repeats the same information and does not answer the question directly. You can say that since you are not working, you don't have a workplace yet, but you would like to work in a place that is comfortable and motivating.

例: Since I am not working yet, I don't have a workplace, but I would like to work in a place that is comfortable and motivating.

提案: Your answer is unclear and confusing. Try to give a clear and direct response about your future plans. For example, 'In the future, I hope to work as a software developer after completing my course.' This shows clarity and purpose.

例: In the future, I hope to work as a software developer after completing my computer course, as I am passionate about coding and technology.

× I do not work. I am a student and doing a computer course.

✓ I do not work. I am a student and I am doing a computer course.

The sentence is missing the auxiliary verb 'am' before the '-ing' form 'doing'. In English, the present continuous tense requires the verb 'to be' plus the '-ing' form of the main verb. So, 'I am doing' is correct instead of just 'doing'.

× I do not work and I did not work.

✓ I do not work and I have not worked.

The sentence mixes present and past simple tenses awkwardly. Since the speaker is referring to their work status up to now, the present perfect tense 'have not worked' is more appropriate to indicate an action that has not occurred until now.

× As I have already said that I do not work, so I do not work.

✓ As I have already said, I do not work.

The sentence is redundant and incorrectly uses both 'as' and 'so' together. 'As' already implies cause, so 'so' is unnecessary. Also, 'that' is not needed after 'said' in this context.

× I am saying that I am not working and I am a student so I do not go to work at any place.

✓ I am saying that I am not working and I am a student, so I do not go to work anywhere.

The phrase 'at any place' is awkward; 'anywhere' is more natural. Also, a comma is needed before 'so' to separate the clauses properly.

× I can do a lot of things, but I want to do something like additionally, moreover, therefore, but I don't know.

✓ I can do a lot of things, but I want to do something; however, I don't know what exactly.

The use of 'like additionally, moreover, therefore, but' is incorrect and confusing. These are discourse markers and cannot be used as examples of 'something'. The sentence is rephrased to convey the intended meaning clearly and grammatically.