Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be more natural by avoiding repetition and adding a linking phrase to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to keep it concise within 3-4 sentences.

例: I currently work as a special educator at a vocational institute that trains children with special needs. This role allows me to support their development and help them gain essential skills.

提案: Your answer repeats the same information from the previous question and ends abruptly. To improve, directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words to make it coherent and complete.

例: I work at a vocational institute that specialises in training children with special needs. I find this job rewarding because it helps these children become more independent and confident in society.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use singular/plural forms correctly and link your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid redundancy and be more specific about how the environment benefits you.

例: Definitely, I enjoy working there because of the positive environment and excellent amenities like computer labs and advanced technology. These resources help me develop my skills and advance my career.

提案: Your answer has some unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes, such as 'accident amenities' and 'apart from that stuff'. To improve, use correct vocabulary and structure your answer clearly with linking words to explain why you like your workplace.

例: Yes, I really like my workplace because it offers excellent amenities like computer labs and well-equipped areas. Moreover, my manager and colleagues are very supportive and always ready to help me when I face challenges.

提案: Your answer is relevant and clear but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words to make it more coherent. Also, avoid repeating 'skills' and try to be more specific about your plans.

例: In the future, I aim to become an expert in working with children who have autism and ADHD. Therefore, I am currently developing my abilities to help them improve their social interaction and concentration levels.

× I find my job quite rewarding because it helps those disadvantaged children to navigate independently in the society by getting training from.

✓ I find my job quite rewarding because it helps those disadvantaged children to navigate independently in society by getting training.

The phrase 'in the society' is incorrect here; 'society' is used in a general sense and does not require the definite article 'the'. Also, the phrase 'by getting training from' is incomplete and unclear. Removing 'from' makes the sentence grammatically correct and clearer.

× Moreover, it offers an excellent amenities such as computer labs, well equipped areas, and advanced technology.

✓ Moreover, it offers excellent amenities such as computer labs, well-equipped areas, and advanced technology.

The word 'amenities' is plural, so the article 'an' is incorrect. It should be omitted. Also, 'well equipped' should be hyphenated as 'well-equipped' when used as an adjective before a noun.

× Definitely, I love working at my office because firstly it provides me accident amenities such as computer labs, technology and well equipped area.

✓ Definitely, I love working at my office because firstly it provides me excellent amenities such as computer labs, technology, and well-equipped areas.

The word 'accident' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'excellent' to convey the intended meaning. Also, 'well equipped area' should be plural 'well-equipped areas' to match the plural 'amenities'. Additionally, 'well equipped' should be hyphenated.

× Apart from that stuff and the manager are quite considerate and always ready to help me whenever I face challenges.

✓ Apart from that, the staff and the manager are quite considerate and always ready to help me whenever I face challenges.

The phrase 'Apart from that stuff' is incorrect; it should be 'Apart from that, the staff' to correctly introduce the subject. Also, 'stuff' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'staff' referring to employees.