Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较为完整，表达清晰，但可以更自然地连接信息，避免句子过长。建议使用连接词使回答更流畅。

例: I'm currently a junior at Jiang University, where I have been studying nursing for three years. I plan to graduate next year.

提案: 回答直接但表达不够自然，语法有误。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意时态和冠词的使用。

例: I don't have a job at the moment because I'm still a university student.

提案: 回答中断且表达不完整，缺少具体细节和连贯性。建议补充具体理由，并使用连接词使句子完整。

例: Yes, Shenzhen is a good place to work because it is a modern city that offers many opportunities for young people to be creative and develop their careers.

提案: 回答不连贯且重复，表达混乱。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复，并提供具体原因。

例: Yes, I like the place where I work because it has a relaxing atmosphere and I enjoy working with my colleagues.

提案: 回答基本清楚，但表达不够自然，语法有误。建议使用更地道的表达方式，并丰富细节。

例: I plan to work at a hospital near my home so that I can commute quickly and avoid waking up too early.

× I don't have a work now because I'm still a student in university.

✓ I don't have work now because I'm still a student at university.

这里的work是不可数名词，不需要加冠词a。并且in university应改为at university，表示在大学学习。

× Yes, Shenzhen is a good place to work because this is a modern city, it will provide many opportunities for younger people to create and uh.

✓ Yes, Shenzhen is a good place to work because it is a modern city and it provides many opportunities for young people to create and uh.

原句中逗号连接了两个独立句，应该用连词and连接。younger people改为young people更自然。

× Yes, I love this place because when I work in the place I feel relaxed and I really enjoy the atmosphere in this area and when I work with my when my work.

✓ Yes, I love this place because when I work here, I feel relaxed and really enjoy the atmosphere in this area.

原句结构混乱，重复且不完整，需简化并去除多余部分，使句子通顺。

× I plan to work into the hospital close to my home because I can go to work quickly so I don't have to get up early.

✓ I plan to work at the hospital close to my home because I can get to work quickly so I don't have to get up early.

work后面应接介词at表示在某地工作，into表示进入，不合适。go to work quickly改为get to work quickly更自然。