Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có sự lặp lại từ "I'm" và cấu trúc câu chưa rõ ràng, bạn nên tránh lặp từ và trình bày ý một cách mạch lạc hơn. Hãy cố gắng trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn, ví dụ như: "I am currently a student. I just graduated from high school and am preparing to start working soon."

例: I am currently a student. I just graduated from high school and am preparing to start working soon.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có sự lặp lại và chưa hoàn chỉnh, thiếu sự rõ ràng và mạch lạc. Bạn nên tránh lặp từ, hoàn thiện câu và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ: "I work in the city center. I enjoy the dynamic environment because it allows me to be closer to my students."

例: I work in the city center. I enjoy the dynamic environment because it allows me to be closer to my students.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời khá tốt với cấu trúc rõ ràng và sử dụng liên từ hợp lý. Tuy nhiên, từ "wealthy" không phù hợp để mô tả môi trường làm việc, bạn nên dùng từ "positive" hoặc "pleasant". Hãy chú ý chọn từ vựng phù hợp với ngữ cảnh.

例: Yes, I believe it is a good place to work because the environment is positive and supportive, which helps employees stay motivated. Additionally, the company offers good benefits and opportunities for professional growth.

提案: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp từ "help me". Bạn nên sửa lại câu cho đúng ngữ pháp và rõ ràng hơn, ví dụ: "Yes, I like the place where I work because the environment is very pleasant and supportive, which helps me stay focused and motivated."

例: Yes, I like the place where I work because the environment is very pleasant and supportive, which helps me stay focused and motivated.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn bị ngắt quãng và thiếu liên kết giữa các câu. Bạn nên nối các ý lại thành câu hoàn chỉnh và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ví dụ: "In the future, I plan to pursue a career in languages because I'm passionate about culture and history. I also want to gain more experience in this field."

例: In the future, I plan to pursue a career in languages because I'm passionate about culture and history. I also want to gain more experience in this field.

× I'm I'm still a student right now.

✓ I'm still a student right now.

The repetition of 'I'm' is unnecessary and incorrect. The sentence should have only one 'I'm' to be grammatically correct.

× I had just graduated from high school and now I'm preparing to work.

✓ I have just graduated from high school and now I'm preparing to work.

The present perfect tense 'have just graduated' is appropriate here to indicate a recent action relevant to the present, rather than the past perfect 'had just graduated' which is used for actions completed before another past action.

× I work at I work at center of my city.

✓ I work at the center of my city.

The sentence has a repeated phrase 'I work at' and is missing the definite article 'the' before 'center'. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I enjoy the dynamic environment there because it allows me to closer to my students and.

✓ I enjoy the dynamic environment there because it allows me to be closer to my students.

The phrase 'allows me to closer' is incorrect; it should be 'allows me to be closer'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and should end properly.

× Yes, I would like the place where I'm working because the environment very pleasant and supportive which helps me to help me more focus and motivating.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work because the environment is very pleasant and supportive, which helps me focus more and stay motivated.

The sentence has missing verbs ('is'), redundant phrases ('helps me to help me'), and incorrect adjective/adverb usage. Correcting these improves grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× In the future, I plan to pursue. A career in language because I'm passionate about culture and history.

✓ In the future, I plan to pursue a career in language because I'm passionate about culture and history.

The sentence is incorrectly split into two parts with a period after 'pursue'. Combining them into one sentence corrects the structure.

× I am to gain more experience.

✓ I want to gain more experience.

The phrase 'I am to gain' is incomplete and unclear. Using 'I want to gain' clearly expresses intention and is grammatically correct.