Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer provides relevant information but lacks clarity and natural flow. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I am currently a student. I recently completed my Bachelor's degree in Home Economics from Bangladesh, majoring in Food and Nutrition.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Make sure to use correct verb tenses and articles. Also, keep your answer concise and clear, directly addressing the question.

例: Last year, I worked as an assistant manager at an international company. However, I am not working now because I am focusing on my higher studies.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words like 'so, so' and ensure subject-verb agreement.

例: In my opinion, it was a good place to work because the environment was peaceful, and my colleagues were very friendly.

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be improved by correcting grammar and making the sentence more natural. Use linking words to connect your ideas and clarify your reason for leaving.

例: Yes, I liked working at the company and enjoyed my job. However, I had to quit because I wanted to pursue further education.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific details about your future plans. Avoid unnecessary phrases and ensure correct article usage.

例: I am studying Food and Nutrition because I have always wanted to become a nutritionist. My future plan is to work as a dietitian.

× Well I am a student currently I finished my BC from Bangladesh home economics.

✓ Well, I am currently a student. I finished my BC from Bangladesh Home Economics.

The sentence combines present and past tense awkwardly. 'I am a student currently' should be 'I am currently a student' for natural word order. Also, 'finished' is past tense and correctly used here, but the sentence needs punctuation to separate ideas clearly.

× My major is food and nutrition.

✓ My major is Food and Nutrition.

'Food and Nutrition' is a proper noun referring to a specific field of study and should be capitalized. No article is needed here.

× Last year I was working in a international company where I work as a assistant manager.

✓ Last year I was working in an international company where I worked as an assistant manager.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound as in 'international' and 'assistant'. Also, 'work' should be past tense 'worked' to match 'Last year I was working'.

× Now for my higher study I cannot I do not work anymore.

✓ Now, for my higher studies, I do not work anymore.

The phrase 'I cannot I do not work anymore' is incorrect and redundant. 'I do not work anymore' is sufficient. Also, 'higher study' should be plural 'higher studies'.

× In my point of view, it's a good place for work in our company is so, so peaceful and the people around me or was so friendly with me and yeah, it's a good place.

✓ In my point of view, it's a good place to work. Our company is very peaceful, and the people around me were very friendly. Yeah, it's a good place.

The phrase 'good place for work' should be 'good place to work'. The sentence is run-on and needs to be split for clarity. 'Or was' is incorrect; it should be 'were'. Also, 'so, so peaceful' is informal and better as 'very peaceful'.

× Yes, I like the place where I work and I enjoy working in this company, but unfortunately I have to quit the job for my partner education.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work and enjoy working in this company, but unfortunately I have to quit the job for my partner's education.

'Partner education' needs possessive form 'partner's education'. The sentence is otherwise correct in modal verb usage.

× Do I study in food and nutrition? I always wanted to become a nutritionist, so my future present is to become an dietitian.

✓ I study food and nutrition. I have always wanted to become a nutritionist, so my future plan is to become a dietitian.

'Do I study' is a question form but the context requires a statement. 'Future present' is incorrect; it should be 'future plan'. Also, 'an dietitian' should be 'a dietitian' because 'dietitian' starts with a consonant sound.