Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá đầy đủ nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn và tránh lặp từ. Bạn nên tập trung trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi trước, sau đó mới bổ sung chi tiết. Ví dụ, bạn có thể nói rõ bạn là sinh viên và đang làm việc bán thời gian, sau đó nói thêm về chuyên ngành và công việc hiện tại.

例: I am currently a student majoring in international business. I will graduate next year. Meanwhile, I work part-time in a company's department to gain practical experience.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu chưa rõ ràng, làm giảm tính tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, tránh hỏi lại người phỏng vấn, và sử dụng các liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn.

例: I work in the courts and ordering department at Stella Holding Limited Company, which is a Taiwanese firm. Working here allows me to communicate with many international partners and improve my skills and knowledge.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Tránh lỗi như 'the firstly', 'my employee' (nên là 'my employer' hoặc 'my colleagues'). Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và cụ thể hơn về lý do bạn thích nơi làm việc.

例: I think it's a great place to work because my colleagues are very friendly and supportive. For example, when I face difficult clients, they help me learn how to communicate effectively and solve problems.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, làm giảm tính tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, tránh dùng từ không phù hợp như 'content' thay vì 'environment' hoặc 'facilities'. Hãy trình bày rõ ràng lý do bạn thích nơi làm việc.

例: I really like my workplace because it has a comfortable environment. The office is spacious, and employees are allowed to rest during the midday, which makes it better than other companies.

提案: Bạn trả lời khá rõ ràng nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn và sửa một số lỗi nhỏ như 'a masters degree' nên là 'a master's degree'. Hãy thêm một chút chi tiết để câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

例: I plan to work at this company for two or three years. Then, I will pursue a master's degree in Singapore to gain new knowledge and improve my skills. After that, I hope to work for another international company to broaden my experience.

× By the time next year I will have graduated from my university.

✓ By this time next year, I will have graduated from my university.

The phrase 'By the time next year' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'By this time next year' to indicate a point in the future by which an action will be completed.

× I am currently working at the courts and ordering department at Stella Holding Limited Company.

✓ I am currently working in the courts and ordering department at Stella Holding Limited Company.

The preposition 'in' is used to indicate being inside a department or section, whereas 'at' is used for locations. Therefore, 'working in the courts and ordering department' is correct.

× Is it a Taiwan company? And I'm when working here I have the chance to communicate with a lot of international partnership and also training my skills and my knowledge.

✓ Is it a Taiwanese company? When I work here, I have the chance to communicate with many international partners and also to train my skills and knowledge.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'Taiwan' should be the adjective 'Taiwanese'; 'I'm when working here' is incorrect and should be 'When I work here'; 'a lot of international partnership' should be 'many international partners'; 'training' should be 'to train' to match the verb form.

× The firstly that my employee is a very friendly and hospitable.

✓ Firstly, my employer is very friendly and hospitable.

'The firstly' is incorrect; 'Firstly' is an adverb and should not have 'the'. Also, 'employee' should be 'employer' if referring to the company or person who employs. The sentence structure is corrected accordingly.

× They also help me working with heart problems and for example when I have faced a a very hard client they help me to how to talk with them and deal with this problem.

✓ They also help me with difficult problems, and for example, when I have faced a very difficult client, they help me how to talk with them and deal with the problem.

'Help me working' is incorrect; it should be 'help me with'. 'Heart problems' seems to be a mishearing or typo; likely 'hard problems' or 'difficult problems' is intended. 'Help me to how to talk' is incorrect; it should be 'help me how to talk' or 'help me to talk'.

× I'm passion for the place where I'm working for.

✓ I'm passionate about the place where I work.

'I'm passion' is incorrect; the adjective form 'passionate' is needed. Also, 'working for' is redundant here; 'where I work' is sufficient. The preposition 'about' is used with 'passionate'.

× Firstly, they have a very beautiful content for the employee and secondly, the post office is very uh wide and I can also take a nap in the midday and it's also offer employees the relaxed time, uh, much better than other company.

✓ Firstly, they have very beautiful content for the employees, and secondly, the office is very spacious. I can also take a nap at midday, and it also offers employees relaxed time, which is much better than other companies.

'Content' is unclear; possibly 'environment' or 'facilities' is meant. 'Post office' is incorrect; likely 'office' is intended. 'Wide' should be 'spacious'. 'Midday' is used without 'the'. 'It's also offer' should be 'it also offers'. 'Other company' should be plural 'other companies'.

× From my perspective, I will work for this company for around two or three years.

✓ From my perspective, I will work for this company for around two or three years.

This sentence is correct in future tense and needs no correction.

× After that, I will study a masters degree in Singapore where I can gain more new knowledge and improve my skill.

✓ After that, I will study for a master's degree in Singapore where I can gain new knowledge and improve my skills.

'Study a masters degree' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'study for a master's degree'. 'More new knowledge' is redundant; 'new knowledge' suffices. 'Skill' should be plural 'skills'.

× And after that, I will try to find another international company.

✓ And after that, I will try to find another international company to work for.

The sentence is incomplete; 'find another international company' needs clarification, such as 'to work for' to complete the meaning.