Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较简短，缺少细节和连贯性。建议在回答中加入更多关于专业或学习内容的描述，使回答更丰富自然。

例: I'm currently a student at Zhejiang University of Economics and Finance, where I am majoring in International Business. I find my courses very engaging and they prepare me well for my future career.

提案: 回答语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱。建议使用正确时态和连贯的句子表达未来计划，同时避免重复。

例: I plan to work in Australia after I complete my two-year master's degree and obtain the necessary work certification there.

提案: 表达不够自然，存在语法错误和重复词汇。建议使用更地道的表达方式，并且提供具体理由支持观点。

例: Definitely, Australia is a great place to work because it offers one of the highest hourly wages globally and has excellent career development opportunities for employees.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，句子结构混乱。建议简洁明了地表达观点，并用连词连接句子。

例: Yes, I would love to work there because the environment is warm, the economy is developing which provides a convenient lifestyle, and the people are very friendly.

提案: 时态使用错误，表达不清晰。建议使用正确的时态和句子结构，明确表达未来计划。

例: In the future, I plan to study for an MBA in the United States to improve my management skills when I become a manager or senior manager.

× I will work in Australia after finish my master degree, two years master degree and apply for the work certification in Australia.

✓ I will work in Australia after finishing my master's degree, a two-year master's degree, and applying for the work certification in Australia.

句中“after finish”应使用动名词形式“after finishing”，因为介词后应接动名词。此外，“master degree”应为“master's degree”，表示学位所有格。

× Definitely a splendid place for employee to work due to the maximum per hour salary around the world and also the the system for employee to develop their career.

✓ Definitely a splendid place for employees to work due to the highest hourly salary in the world and also the system for employees to develop their careers.

“employee”应为复数“employees”，因为指的是一般员工群体；“maximum per hour salary”应改为“highest hourly salary”，更符合英语表达习惯；“the the”重复，应删除一个；“employee”后面同样应为复数“employees”，“career”应为复数“careers”，表示多人的职业发展。

× Yes, I love it very much, the place, the environment there was very warm and the economics will development provide a convenient life and people there are very friendly.

✓ Yes, I love it very much. The place and the environment there are very warm, and the economic development provides a convenient life. People there are very friendly.

“environment there was”时态不一致，应为“environment there are”；“economics will development”结构错误，应为“economic development”；“provide”主语为单数，应用“provides”；句子应拆分为更清晰的几句。

× Maybe I will choose to study an MBA Master in United States to enhance my management skills when I was in manager senior manager positions.

✓ Maybe I will choose to study an MBA in the United States to enhance my management skills when I am in manager or senior manager positions.

“in United States”前应加定冠词“the”；“MBA Master”重复，MBA本身即硕士学位，应去掉“Master”；“when I was”时态错误，应为将来时“when I am”；“manager senior manager positions”缺少连接词，应为“manager or senior manager positions”。