Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Hãy cố gắng sử dụng cấu trúc câu đúng và từ vựng phù hợp để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: I am currently a student. I have just finished my 12th grade this summer, so I feel quite busy with my studies.

提案: Bạn trả lời không đúng trọng tâm câu hỏi vì câu hỏi hỏi về nơi làm việc, nhưng bạn trả lời về trường học của mình. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác.

例: I don't work because I am a student. I study at Dalito High School, which is a beautiful place and I have many good memories there.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tốt nhưng có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lặp từ và dùng từ phù hợp hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, definitely. I think my high school is a good place because the teachers are very friendly and always help students improve their skills. Also, the school offers many activities, so I feel comfortable here.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn không rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi từ vựng. Hãy diễn đạt ý muốn nói một cách mạch lạc và logic.

例: Yes, I would like to work in a comfortable and well-equipped place where I can learn a lot and stay motivated.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn rất khó hiểu do lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi phát âm hoặc từ sai. Hãy trình bày kế hoạch tương lai một cách cụ thể và mạch lạc.

例: My future plan is to pass the IELTS exam with a band score of seven. I am studying hard every day to improve my speaking, listening, reading, and writing skills.

× I am a student right now and past the summer I have become to 12 classes and it's the end of this my of my school so I have have it on my plate and yes it's feel more busy.

✓ I am a student right now and last summer I took 12 classes and it's the end of this year of my school so I have it on my plate and yes it feels busier.

The sentence contains incorrect past tense usage such as 'past the summer' instead of 'last summer', and 'have become to 12 classes' which is incorrect; it should be 'took 12 classes'. Also, 'it's feel more busy' should be 'it feels busier' to agree with the subject and comparative form. Use past tense correctly to describe completed actions in the past.

× I have become to 12 classes

✓ I took 12 classes

The phrase 'become to 12 classes' is incorrect. The verb 'become' does not take 'to' in this context. The correct verb to express attending classes in the past is 'took'. Use appropriate verbs and prepositions to convey meaning accurately.

× yes it's feel more busy

✓ yes it feels busier

The subject 'it' is singular, so the verb should be 'feels' not 'feel'. Also, 'more busy' should be 'busier' as the comparative form of 'busy'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct comparative adjective forms.

× I'm not worried because I'm a student right now, but I'm a student in Dalito High School.

✓ I'm not worried because I'm a student right now, and I study at Dalito High School.

The sentence is somewhat awkward and repetitive. Using 'but' is incorrect here because the second clause adds information rather than contrasting. Also, 'I'm a student in Dalito High School' is better expressed as 'I study at Dalito High School'. Use appropriate conjunctions and prepositions.

× I have too many memorable in Rice play in right here.

✓ I have many memorable moments in Rice play right here.

'Too many' implies an excessive amount, which may not be intended. Also, 'memorable' is an adjective and should be 'memorable moments' as a noun phrase. The phrase 'Rice play in right here' is unclear and likely a mishearing or miswriting; assuming 'Rice play' is a place or event, it should be clarified. Use correct quantifiers and noun forms.

× Many teacher in school is so friendly and always help student to improve my skill and learn from a lot the teach that they share.

✓ Many teachers in school are so friendly and always help students to improve their skills and learn from a lot of the teaching that they share.

'Teacher' should be plural 'teachers' to agree with 'many'. The verb 'is' should be 'are' to agree with plural subject. 'Student' should be plural 'students'. 'My skill' should be 'their skills' to match plural students. 'Teach' should be 'teaching'. Ensure correct singular/plural forms and subject-verb agreement.

× help student to improve my skill

✓ help students to improve their skills

The pronouns should agree in number and person. 'Student' should be plural 'students' and 'my skill' should be 'their skills' to refer to the students collectively.

× learn from a lot the teach that they share

✓ learn from a lot of the teaching that they share

The phrase 'a lot the teach' is incorrect. It should be 'a lot of the teaching'. Use correct prepositions and noun forms.

× And yes the school have many career and I feel comfortable in right here.

✓ And yes, the school has many careers and I feel comfortable right here.

'School' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' not 'have'. 'Career' should be plural 'careers' if referring to multiple options. 'In right here' is incorrect; 'right here' suffices. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage.

× Yes, I would definitely like to play comfortable and well equipped that I can learn it a lot and exports my productive study and motivation for.

✓ Yes, I would definitely like to have a comfortable and well-equipped place where I can learn a lot and express my productive study and motivation.

'Like to play comfortable' is incorrect; it should be 'like to have a comfortable place'. 'Well equipped' should be hyphenated as 'well-equipped'. 'Exports' is incorrect; likely meant 'express'. The sentence structure is awkward and needs correction for clarity and correct modal verb usage.

× I have a alarm on my plate, so the nearly future work plan is is that reaches the seven palm aisle.

✓ I have an alarm on my plate, so the near future work plan is to reach the seven palm aisle.

'Have a alarm' should be 'have an alarm' due to vowel sound. 'Nearly future' should be 'near future'. 'Is is that reaches' is incorrect; should be 'is to reach'. The phrase 'seven palm aisle' is unclear but kept as is. Use correct articles and verb forms.

× I have a alarm on my plate

✓ I have an alarm on my plate

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a word starting with a vowel sound like 'alarm'. Use correct articles before nouns.

× I burned the midnight arm and I have the degrees to study iron speaking, listening, reading, writing.

✓ I burn the midnight oil and I have the degrees to study in speaking, listening, reading, and writing.

The phrase 'burned the midnight arm' is incorrect; the correct idiom is 'burn the midnight oil'. 'Study iron' is likely a mishearing of 'study in' or 'study for'. Use correct idioms and prepositions.