Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时句子结构较为复杂且有些语法错误，建议简化句子结构，避免语法错误，同时回答应更直接，突出主题。

例: I am currently a student majoring in education. I feel confident and satisfied because I want to help students learn and improve.

提案: 回答中有发音错误（fork应为work），语法错误（doing应为do），句子不完整且表达不清晰，建议注意发音，使用完整句子，并清楚表达工作内容。

例: I don't have a full-time job, but I do part-time private tutoring. Whenever I don't have classes, I go to my students' houses to teach them one-on-one.

提案: 回答中表达不清楚，句子结构混乱，重复词汇，建议使用更清晰的句子结构，避免重复，并具体说明原因。

例: Yes, I think it's a good place to work because I prefer private tutoring over being a government teacher. It allows me to focus on one subject and understand each student's personality better.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇（to to），表达稍显口语化且不够简洁，建议避免重复，使用更自然流畅的表达。

例: Yes, I enjoy teaching at students' homes because their parents prepare a suitable place for us. Studying at home is comfortable and suits me well.

提案: 回答中时态使用不当，句子结构不完整，表达不够清晰，建议注意时态一致，使用完整句子，并清楚表达未来计划。

例: I haven't thought about it much before, but if I have the chance to become a teacher, I will feel very satisfied because I can help my students and understand their thoughts.

× Actually, I'm still a student and I major in education and being a teacher I feel so confident and satisfied because I can help students to study and find their way to improve.

✓ Actually, I'm still a student and I major in education. Being a teacher, I feel so confident and satisfied because I can help students to study and find their way to improve.

原句中“and being a teacher”连接不当，导致句子结构混乱。应将其作为独立的分句，用逗号隔开，使句子更通顺。

× Well, I don't have fork but I have a part time job.

✓ Well, I don't have work but I have a part-time job.

原句中“fork”应为“work”，是拼写错误，导致意思不明。应改正为“work”。

× For example, every time I don't have class I will go to my student's house and doing private teaching.

✓ For example, every time I don't have class I will go to my student's house and do private teaching.

“and doing”结构错误，动词应与前面的“go”保持一致，使用动词原形“do”。

× It means that I teach them 1 by 1 and especially.

✓ It means that I teach them one by one, especially.

“1 by 1”应写为“one by one”，且句尾“and especially”不完整，应改为“especially”并加逗号。

× Yes, I believe it is because I don't like to be a government teacher.

✓ Yes, I believe it is because I don't like to be a government teacher.

此句无明显语法错误，保持原句。

× Therefore I believe a private tutorial is suitable for me because I can focus on one subject or have one student's personality and it makes me have a better better.

✓ Therefore, I believe a private tutorial is suitable for me because I can focus on one subject or on one student's personality, and it makes me better.

“or have one student's personality”表达不清，应改为“or on one student's personality”。“better better”重复，应删去一个“better”。

× Yes, I am enjoying teaching someone in their house because their parents will prepare some suitable place for us to to teach them.

✓ Yes, I enjoy teaching someone in their house because their parents prepare a suitable place for us to teach them.

“am enjoying”时态不合适，改为一般现在时“enjoy”。“some suitable place”应改为“a suitable place”。“to to”重复，应删去一个“to”。

× That is to say, uh studying in someone's house is more suitable for me and I can feel comfortable.

✓ That is to say, studying in someone's house is more suitable for me and I can feel comfortable.

“uh”是口语填充词，书面语中应去掉。

× Hmm, actually I don't think about it before, but I imagine if I have a chance to become a teacher I will feel really satisfied because I can help my students and knowing and know what they are thinking about.

✓ Hmm, actually I haven't thought about it before, but I imagine if I have a chance to become a teacher I will feel really satisfied because I can help my students and know what they are thinking about.

“don't think about it before”时态错误，应改为现在完成时“haven't thought about it before”。“knowing and know”重复且用法错误，应删去“knowing”。