Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱，建议简化句子，明确表达身份和感受，避免语法错误。

例: I am currently a student at National Tsinghua University, majoring in Education. I feel refreshed and energized whenever I teach others.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，建议使用更自然的表达方式，简洁明了地说明兼职工作内容。

例: I don't have a full-time job, but I do part-time private tutoring. Whenever I have free time, I visit my students' homes to teach them one-on-one.

提案: 表达不够清晰，词汇使用不当，建议明确表达观点，避免使用模糊词汇，注意礼貌用语。

例: Yes, I think it's a good place to work, but it depends on the client's home environment. Some houses may not be very clean, which can be uncomfortable.

提案: 回答较为清楚，但语法和表达仍需改进，建议使用完整句子并举具体例子。

例: Yes, I enjoy teaching students one-on-one at their homes because I can focus on their individual needs and help them study more effectively. For example, I can help a student improve her math skills.

提案: 回答不够流畅，语法错误较多，建议提前准备答案，使用更自然的表达方式，明确未来计划。

例: I haven't thought about it much before, but if I have the chance, I would like to become a private teacher rather than a government school teacher, and work hard to get more students.

× I'm still a student studying National Tsinghua University am I major in education which makes me feel.

✓ I'm still a student studying at National Tsinghua University, and I am majoring in education, which makes me feel happy.

原句结构混乱，缺少连词和介词，导致句意不清。应添加介词'at'表示在某地学习，使用连词'and'连接两个句子，并将动词改为现在进行时以符合语境。

× However I when whenever I teach some people I feel much refreshed and re energized.

✓ However, whenever I teach some people, I feel much refreshed and re-energized.

原句中'However I when whenever'重复且混乱，应去掉多余词汇，使用'However, whenever'作为正确的连接词组，并在句中适当加逗号。

× Actually I don't have work but I have a part time job.

✓ Actually, I don't have work, but I have a part-time job.

'part time'应连写为'part-time'作为形容词使用，且句中缺少逗号以分隔句子。

× Uh every time I have free time I will go to my student's house and be in a private tutoring and this means I went to students house and teach 1 by 1.

✓ Every time I have free time, I go to my student's house to do private tutoring, which means I go to students' houses and teach one-on-one.

原句中'be in a private tutoring'用法错误，应改为'do private tutoring'；'students house'缺少所有格，应为'students' houses'；数字'1 by 1'应写为'one-on-one'。

× Yes, I believe it is good work, but when it comes to a place, I I guess it depends on uh, what kind of my client is for the reason that some people's house may be very disgusted or hmm.

✓ Yes, I believe it is good work, but when it comes to the place, I guess it depends on what kind of client I have, because some people's houses may be very dirty or unpleasant.

原句中'what kind of my client is'结构不正确，应改为'what kind of client I have'；'disgusted'用词错误，应为形容词'dirty'或'unpleasant'描述房子。

× Yes, I enjoy teach people one by one in their house for the reason that I can focus on what they need and make them study efficiently.

✓ Yes, I enjoy teaching people one by one in their houses because I can focus on what they need and help them study efficiently.

动词'enjoy'后应接动名词'teaching'，'make them study'改为'help them study'更自然，'house'应复数'houses'。

× For example, if she needs math skill.

✓ For example, if she needs math skills, I can help her improve.

原句为不完整句，缺少主句，需补充完整表达。

× Umm, I never think it before, but I if I have the opportunity to imagine that I believe that I will be a teacher, but I'm not a government teacher but a private teacher and make effort to get more students.

✓ Umm, I have never thought about it before, but if I have the opportunity, I imagine that I will be a teacher. However, I won't be a government teacher but a private teacher, and I will make an effort to get more students.

'never think'应为现在完成时'have never thought'；句子结构混乱，需拆分为多个句子；'make effort'应为'make an effort'；时态和语态需统一。