Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains redundancy. Instead of saying "legal profession professional," you could say "legal professional." Also, try to form a complete sentence that directly answers the question and adds relevant details without repetition.

例: I am currently working as a legal professional and have about seven years of experience in this field.

提案: Your answer is too long and contains repetition and some grammatical errors. Try to use linking words properly and avoid repeating words like "work work." Also, clarify your points in a more natural way.

例: I work at Cognizant India in Mumbai. The environment is very supportive and collaborative. However, since we work from home, I don't get the chance to work late into the night as I would in the office.

提案: Your answer has some hesitation and unclear phrases like "upscale yourself" and "burn the Menard Oil." Use correct idioms and avoid filler words like "uh." Also, try to provide clear reasons to support your opinion.

例: Yes, it is a good place to work because it allows me time to improve my skills. However, I don't often get the chance to work late hours as I would in an office setting.

提案: Your answer is generally good but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to make your sentences clearer and more natural by correcting grammar and using appropriate vocabulary.

例: Yes, I like my workplace because the environment is very collaborative and supportive. In my profession, I have opportunities for growth and to enhance my skills.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical mistakes. Use correct verb forms and article usage. Also, try to expand your answer slightly to make it more informative.

例: I have been working in the legal industry for seven years, and my future plan is to become the Vice President of Legal Affairs in an organization.

× I'm currently working as a legal profession professional and having about 7 years of experience.

✓ I'm currently working as a legal professional and have about 7 years of experience.

The phrase 'legal profession professional' is incorrect because 'profession' is a noun and should not be repeated. Also, 'having' should be 'have' to correctly express possession of experience in the present tense.

× I work in Cognizant India which is situated in Mumbai and the environment is very supportive and collaborative and however the work work setup is work from home which doesn't give me the chance to burn the midnight oil.

✓ I work at Cognizant India, which is situated in Mumbai. The environment is very supportive and collaborative; however, the work setup is work from home, which doesn't give me the chance to burn the midnight oil.

The preposition 'in' should be 'at' when referring to a company. Also, the sentence was run-on and needed proper punctuation and conjunctions for clarity.

× Yes indeed, it is a good place to work. Uh, it gives you time to upscale uh, yourself and and doesn't often get the chance to burn the Menard Oil as I would in office settings.

✓ Yes indeed, it is a good place to work. It gives you time to upskill yourself and you don't often get the chance to burn the midnight oil as you would in office settings.

The phrase 'upscale yourself' is incorrect; the correct term is 'upskill yourself'. Also, 'doesn't often get the chance' is incorrect because the subject is 'you', so it should be 'you don't often get the chance'. 'Menard Oil' is a mishearing of 'midnight oil'.

× Yes, I like the place where I work because the office environment is very collaborative and very supportive. I in my profession, I have the growth and I have the chance to upskill myself.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work because the office environment is very collaborative and very supportive. In my profession, I have growth and the chance to upskill myself.

The phrase 'I in my profession' is incorrect and should be 'In my profession'. Also, 'I have the growth' is incorrect; 'growth' is uncountable here and does not need 'the'.

× It's been seven years in the industry of legal and my future work plans includes being a vice president legal of an organization.

✓ It's been seven years in the legal industry and my future work plans include being a vice president legal of an organization.

The phrase 'industry of legal' is incorrect; it should be 'legal industry'. Also, 'plans includes' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; 'plans' is plural and should be followed by 'include'. Additionally, 'vice president legal' is missing an article or preposition, but since it is a title, it can be left as is or better phrased as 'vice president of legal affairs'.