Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免重复和语法错误，句子应更简洁自然。可以直接说“I'm currently a university student majoring in accounting, and I've been studying for about two years.”

例: I'm currently a university student majoring in accounting, and I've been studying for about two years.

提案: 回答中表达不够清晰，语法和用词有误，应更准确表达职业兴趣和原因。建议说“I'm not working now, but I hope to become an accountant because I enjoy solving financial problems and working with a team.”

例: I'm not working now, but I hope to become an accountant because I enjoy solving financial problems and working with a team.

提案: 回答不够直接且表达混乱，应直接回答问题并用连词连接细节。比如“It's a good place to work if it has a friendly atmosphere where people are helpful and supportive.”

例: It's a good place to work if it has a friendly atmosphere where people are helpful and supportive.

提案: 回答较啰嗦且重复，建议简洁表达并用连词连接观点。比如“I would like it very much if the workplace has a friendly and supportive environment.”

例: I would like it very much if the workplace has a friendly and supportive environment.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达错误，建议简洁明了地表达计划和理由。比如“My future plan is to become an accountant because I enjoy organizing financial information and solving financial problems with my team.”

例: My future plan is to become an accountant because I enjoy organizing financial information and solving financial problems with my team.

× I keep studying for about two years.

✓ I have been studying for about two years.

这里使用现在完成进行时态更合适，表示从过去开始一直持续到现在的动作。原句中使用一般现在时的keep studying不符合时间表达。

× I am in the university

✓ I am at the university

表示在某个具体地点时，通常用介词at而不是in。in更强调在建筑物内部，at更强调在某个地点。

× I enjoy working with members and serving financial problems

✓ I enjoy working with members and solving financial problems

原句中serving financial problems用词不当，financial problems不能被服务，应该用solving表示解决问题。

× the work which is as a content maybe fit me well

✓ the work which is as an accountant may fit me well

content是内容，语境应为accountant（会计师），且may表示可能性，maybe用法不当。

× I suggest that I can imagine a place, a ideal place I walk to

✓ I suggest that I can imagine an ideal place I walk to

冠词使用错误，a后面应接辅音音素开头的词，ideal发音以元音音素开头，应使用an。

× a ideal place

✓ an ideal place

同上，冠词与形容词搭配错误，an用于元音音素开头的词前。

× people here are always friendly and helpful and always help others

✓ people here are always friendly and helpful and always help others

此句无明显语法错误，保持原句。

× If it is an ideal place and it has a friendly environment and people here are always helpful and supportive, I think I would like it very much and it is on the top of my list, I think.

✓ If it is an ideal place and it has a friendly environment and people here are always helpful and supportive, I think I would like it very much and it is at the top of my list, I think.

短语应为"at the top of the list"，介词使用错误。

× I am really good at cooperating with financial problems and dealing with some something with members

✓ I am really good at cooperating on financial problems and dealing with something with members

cooperate通常与介词on搭配，表示合作处理某事。原句中with用法不当。

× dealing with some something with members

✓ dealing with something with members

some something是重复且错误的表达，应去掉some。