Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a direct and clear answer first, then add relevant details. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, say "I am currently working as a customer associate at Amazon. I have completed my undergraduate studies in Bicom Computer Application."

例: I am currently working as a customer associate at Amazon. I have completed my undergraduate studies in Bicom Computer Application.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, correct grammar and use specific vocabulary. For example, "I work from home as a customer associate at Amazon. It is an online platform where I assist customers by answering their product-related queries through chat."

例: I work from home as a customer associate at Amazon. It is an online platform where I assist customers by answering their product-related queries through chat.

提案: Provide a clear opinion with supporting reasons using linking words. For example, "Yes, it is a good place to work because I can work from home, which is convenient. Moreover, technology allows me to perform my tasks efficiently without many limitations."

例: Yes, it is a good place to work because I can work from home, which is convenient. Moreover, technology allows me to perform my tasks efficiently without many limitations.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain your preference. For example, "Yes, I like working from home because it is comfortable and saves commuting time."

例: Yes, I like working from home because it is comfortable and saves commuting time.

提案: Make your answer clearer and more structured. Use linking words and correct grammar. For example, "Honestly, in the future, I plan to start and expand my own business independently. I want to develop my business ideas and grow successfully."

例: Honestly, in the future, I plan to start and expand my own business independently. I want to develop my business ideas and grow successfully.

× I have completed my studies in undergraduate in Bicom computer application.

✓ I have completed my undergraduate studies in Bicom Computer Application.

The phrase 'studies in undergraduate' is incorrect; 'undergraduate studies' is the correct plural noun phrase. Also, 'Computer Application' should be capitalized as it is a course name.

× I am working as a customer associate in Amazon.

✓ I am working as a customer associate at Amazon.

The word 'associate' should be preceded by an article 'a' and 'Amazon' is a company name, so the preposition 'at' is more appropriate than 'in'.

× I work as a customer associate in the Amazon.

✓ I work as a customer associate at Amazon.

The definite article 'the' is not used before company names like 'Amazon'. Also, 'at' is the correct preposition for workplaces.

× It is a online platform which we have to chat with the customers any queries related to the product.

✓ It is an online platform where we chat with customers about any queries related to the product.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound. 'Which we have to chat with' is incorrect; 'where we chat with' is better. Also, 'any queries related to the product' needs the preposition 'about' to connect properly.

× There is no such limitations on my work.

✓ There are no such limitations on my work.

'Limitations' is plural, so 'are' should be used instead of 'is'. The preposition 'on' is correct here.

× I do regularly sit in a home.

✓ I regularly sit at home.

The phrase 'in a home' is incorrect; 'at home' is the correct expression. Also, 'do regularly sit' is awkward; 'regularly sit' is better.

× Honestly speaking, in future I need to build a business expanded on my own without any support.

✓ Honestly speaking, in the future I need to build and expand a business on my own without any support.

The phrase 'in future' should be 'in the future'. 'Build a business expanded' is incorrect; it should be 'build and expand a business' to express the intended meaning.

× I just grow.

✓ I just want to grow.

The sentence 'I just grow' is incomplete and incorrect in this context. Adding 'want to' clarifies the intention to grow in the future.

× I just want to grow up a business idea.

✓ I just want to grow a business idea.

The phrasal verb 'grow up' is used for people, not ideas or businesses. 'Grow a business idea' is the correct expression.