Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid redundancy and keep it concise. For example, instead of saying "I am a student right now pursuing...", you can say "I am currently pursuing..." Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I am currently pursuing a bachelor's degree in computer science at a local university because I am very interested in technology and programming.

提案: Good direct answer. To improve, avoid repeating phrases like "As I mentioned before" which can sound redundant. Instead, give a straightforward response and add a little detail to enrich your answer.

例: I don't work at the moment since I am a full-time student focusing on my studies.

提案: Your answer has good points but lacks coherence and contains grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar, for example, say "The environment is eco-friendly, and the employees are polite, which fosters good cooperation." Also, avoid mixing tenses unnecessarily.

例: Yes, it is a good place to work. The environment is eco-friendly, and the employees are polite, which fosters excellent cooperation among them.

提案: Your answer is well-structured and detailed. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking phrases to enhance fluency and coherence.

例: Yes, I like the place where I work because the eco-friendly environment makes it comfortable and refreshing. Furthermore, the polite employees and excellent cooperation create a positive and productive atmosphere.

提案: Good clear answer with relevant details. To improve, you can add linking words and expand slightly to make your answer more engaging.

例: In the future, I plan to open my own restaurant because I am passionate about cooking and would love to share my favourite dishes with others.

× I choose this field because I am very interested in technology and programming.

✓ I chose this field because I am very interested in technology and programming.

The verb 'choose' should be in the past tense 'chose' to match the past action of selecting the field. Using the present tense here is incorrect as the decision was made in the past.

× The environment of that place was very eco friendly and the employees are very polite and the cooperation with each other was very good.

✓ The environment of that place was very eco-friendly, the employees were very polite, and the cooperation with each other was very good.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the environment and cooperation are described in the past, 'employees are' should be corrected to 'employees were' to maintain tense consistency. Also, 'eco friendly' should be hyphenated as 'eco-friendly'.