Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文が長く繰り返しがあり、自然な英語表現ではありません。より簡潔で明確な文を心がけ、冗長な表現を避けましょう。

例: I am a university student in Tokyo, studying psychology.

提案: 回答が不明瞭で文法的な誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。質問に対して直接的かつ明確に答え、文を短く整理しましょう。

例: My university is located in Massachusetts City, Tokyo. I live far from there, so it takes a long time to commute.

提案: 理由を述べていますが、繰り返しや不自然な表現があり、論理的なつながりが弱いです。接続詞を使って論理的に説明し、具体的な理由を明確にしましょう。

例: I have been going there since high school, but since the university is far from the station, I think it's not a convenient place to study.

提案: 自然環境について述べていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があり、最後の部分は意味が不明瞭です。具体的な情報を整理し、正確な表現を使いましょう。

例: Yes, I like it because my university is surrounded by nature, with many trees and animals. It is also recognized as one of the best universities in the area.

提案: 意図は伝わりますが、文が途切れ途切れで不自然です。将来の計画について明確かつ簡潔に述べ、文法的に正しい表現を使いましょう。

例: I am not sure about my exact future job, but I hope to work internationally to achieve my dream. Currently, I am preparing for that goal.

× I am studying about the psychology.

✓ I am studying psychology.

In English, the verb 'study' is usually followed directly by the object without the preposition 'about'. Using 'studying about' is incorrect. The correct form is 'studying psychology'.

× I am studying in there

✓ I am studying there

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary before 'there' when indicating location in this context. 'Studying there' is correct, while 'studying in there' is incorrect.

× my university is in in Massachusetts city in Tokyo but there but I am living inside the man now so it's take a long time to go there.

✓ My university is in Massachusetts city in Tokyo, but I am living inside the main area now, so it takes a long time to go there.

The phrase 'inside the man' is incorrect; likely intended 'inside the main area'. Also, 'it's take' should be 'it takes' to agree with singular subject 'it'.

× I have been to there from from high school

✓ I have been there since high school

The phrase 'been to there' is incorrect; 'been there' is correct. Also, 'from from high school' is redundant; 'since high school' is appropriate to indicate time starting point.

× my high school is also up there.

✓ My high school is also up there.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× because the university is a little bit far from the station

✓ because the university is a little bit far from the station

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× I think the place is not good for studying.

✓ I think the place is not good for studying.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× Yes, I like because my university is surrounded by nature.

✓ Yes, I like it because my university is surrounded by nature.

The sentence lacks the object 'it' after 'like'. 'I like because' is incomplete; 'I like it because' is correct.

× my university has many trees and also animals.

✓ My university has many trees and animals.

The sentence is correct; 'many trees and animals' is appropriate plural usage.

× So and as no facts my university is assigned as the best university which have many.

✓ In fact, my university is recognized as the best university which has many [missing object].

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'So and as no facts' is incorrect; 'In fact' is appropriate. 'Assigned as' should be 'recognized as'. 'Which have many' is incomplete; 'which has many' is correct for singular 'university'. The sentence needs completion for clarity.

× I'm not sure about my future work, but now I'm planning to I'm hope.

✓ I'm not sure about my future work, but now I'm planning to, I'm hoping.

The phrase 'I'm planning to I'm hope' is incorrect and incomplete. It should be 'I'm planning to, I'm hoping' or better rephrased for clarity.

× I'm hoping to work internationally in my future for SO for to achieve my dream now I am trying to pass.

✓ I'm hoping to work internationally in the future. To achieve my dream, I am now trying to pass [missing object].

The phrase 'in my future' is better as 'in the future'. 'For SO for to achieve' is incorrect; should be 'To achieve'. The sentence is incomplete and needs clarification on what is being passed.