Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit long and slightly unclear due to redundancy and grammatical errors. Try to be more concise and clear by directly stating your status and role, and avoid repeating phrases. Also, correct grammar mistakes for better clarity.

例: I am a student at Red River College Polytechnic, studying Hospitality and Tourism Management. Currently, I am doing a Co-op placement as an assistant manager at a local gas station, where I apply what I have learned in my course.

提案: Your answer has some hesitation and unclear phrases. Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm', and use complete sentences. Also, improve sentence structure and grammar for clarity and fluency.

例: I work as an assistant manager at Red River Court gas station, which is close to my home. The staff there are very friendly and supportive, so I really enjoy working there.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains repetition and minor grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating phrases and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, it is a good place to work because the environment is pleasant and the team is very supportive. Whenever we face problems, we always help each other, which makes the work enjoyable.

提案: Your answer is clear but has grammatical errors and could be more concise. Use correct tense and singular/plural agreement, and avoid repeating 'working'.

例: Yes, definitely. I have been working there for the past two years, and I especially appreciate my supportive manager and friendly customers.

提案: Your answer is brief and informal. Try to use more formal language and expand your answer with reasons or details to make it more effective.

例: In the future, I plan to establish my own business in the hospitality industry. Specifically, I want to own and manage my own hotel to provide excellent service to guests.