Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but avoid repeating phrases like "a teacher" twice. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly, such as "because" or "which". This will make your response more natural and coherent.

例: I work as a teacher, mainly focusing on teenagers, because I really enjoy the opportunity to educate, guide, and inspire young people. For example, I often organize interactive lessons which encourage students to think critically.

提案: Your answer is informative but contains some grammatical errors, such as missing articles and subject-verb agreement. Also, use linking words like "which" or "that" to connect ideas and improve flow. Try to be more concise and avoid redundancy.

例: I work as a teacher at a public school in Tbilisi, which allows me to create a safe and supportive environment for every child. This encourages them to think critically and develop important skills such as problem solving and teamwork. For example, I often assign group projects that help them work together and learn from each other.

提案: Your answer is honest but starts awkwardly with "And nevertheless." Try to begin directly and use linking words like "although" to express contrast. Also, avoid unnecessary personal details unless relevant, and check grammar for smoother sentences.

例: Although it can be challenging for a young woman like me to work with teenagers, I enjoy my job because it requires patience, time, and various skills that I am continuously developing.

提案: Your answer is good but contains minor errors like repeated words and incomplete ideas at the end. Use linking words such as "because" and "which" to connect ideas. Also, complete your thoughts fully to avoid ambiguity.

例: Yes, I enjoy working as a teacher because it allows me to constantly improve myself in different areas. For example, I have been attending workshops to develop communication and classroom management skills, which are essential for my job. I also like working with teenagers because it gives me the opportunity to help their personal and professional growth.

提案: Your answer is clear and well-structured. To improve, add linking words like "and" or "so that" to connect your ideas more smoothly. Also, include articles such as "a" before "more interactive and supportive environment."

例: In the future, I plan to enhance my classroom management skills by learning new strategies to engage teenagers more effectively, and I want to refine my teaching methods so that I can create a more interactive and supportive environment for learning.

× I work as a teacher, a teacher and mainly focus on teenagers.

✓ I work as a teacher and mainly focus on teenagers.

The phrase 'a teacher, a teacher' is repetitive and incorrect. It should be stated once to avoid redundancy.

× I really enjoy this job because it gives me opportunity to educate, guide and inspire young people and help them develop both academically and personally.

✓ I really enjoy this job because it gives me the opportunity to educate, guide and inspire young people and help them develop both academically and personally.

The phrase 'gives me opportunity' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'opportunity'. In English, 'opportunity' in this context requires 'the'.

× I work as a teacher at public school in Tbilisi and I really enjoy my job because I can create safe and supportive environment for every child.

✓ I work as a teacher at a public school in Tbilisi and I really enjoy my job because I can create a safe and supportive environment for every child.

The phrases 'at public school' and 'create safe and supportive environment' are missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'public school' and 'safe and supportive environment' respectively.

× This encourage them to think critically and develop important skills such as problem solving, teamwork.

✓ This encourages them to think critically and develop important skills such as problem solving and teamwork.

The subject 'This' is singular, so the verb should be 'encourages' (third person singular). Also, 'problem solving, teamwork' should be connected with 'and' to list skills properly.

× For example, I often assign group projects that help them to work together and learn from each other.

✓ For example, I often assign group projects that help them work together and learn from each other.

The verb 'help' is followed by the base form of the verb without 'to'. So 'help them to work' should be 'help them work'.

× And nevertheless, I like my job and I enjoy working with students.

✓ Nevertheless, I like my job and I enjoy working with students.

Starting a sentence with both 'And' and 'nevertheless' is redundant and incorrect. Use only 'Nevertheless' to start the sentence.

× It's hard for young girl like me to work with teenagers because it needs lots of patience, time and different skills that I am trying to develop in myself.

✓ It's hard for a young girl like me to work with teenagers because it needs lots of patience, time and different skills that I am trying to develop in myself.

The phrase 'young girl' needs the indefinite article 'a' before it. Also, 'develop in myself' is awkward; however, it is not in the problem list so left unchanged.

× Yes, I enjoy working as a teacher because it allows me to me to constantly improve myself in different areas.

✓ Yes, I enjoy working as a teacher because it allows me to constantly improve myself in different areas.

The phrase 'me to me to' is a repetition error. Removing the extra 'me to' corrects the sentence.

× I also like working with teenagers because it gives me opportunity to help their personal and professional.

✓ I also like working with teenagers because it gives me the opportunity to help their personal and professional development.

The phrase 'gives me opportunity' is missing the definite article 'the'. Also, 'help their personal and professional' is incomplete; adding 'development' completes the meaning.

× Additionally, I want to refine my teaching methods to create more interactive and supportive environment for learning.

✓ Additionally, I want to refine my teaching methods to create a more interactive and supportive environment for learning.

The phrase 'create more interactive and supportive environment' is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'more interactive'.