Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如时态使用不当和词汇拼写错误。建议注意时态一致性，使用正确的词汇，并使表达更自然流畅。

例: I have been working as a software tester for over 10 years since I graduated in 2014. Being a software tester is my passion, and I really love this job.

提案: 回答时态不一致，且表达略显重复和不够具体。建议使用现在时描述当前工作地点，并提供更具体的细节来支持观点。

例: I work in Shenzhen, which is a vibrant city offering many career opportunities for young people. It attracts professionals from all over the world, making it a diverse and exciting place to work.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，且内容重复。建议使用连贯的句子结构，避免重复，并具体说明为什么是好地方。

例: Yes, definitely. Shenzhen is a dynamic and international city full of business opportunities, especially for young people. Moreover, it offers good living conditions for families and children.

提案: 回答较为自然，但可以通过增加连接词和更具体的细节使表达更连贯和丰富。

例: Absolutely. I love working in Shenzhen because it is an international and modern city. Moreover, it is very convenient to live here, and it is a safe place for young people to live independently.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不够流畅的问题。建议注意动词形式和冠词使用，并使句子更自然连贯。

例: In the short term, I plan to work as a software tester at Amazon within the next three years. In the long term, I hope to find better opportunities in a foreign country.

× I have worked as software tester over 10 years since I graduated in 2024.

✓ I have worked as a software tester for over 10 years since I graduated in 2024.

这里需要使用完成时态表达从过去到现在的持续时间，'have worked'是正确的时态，但缺少冠词'a'，且应使用'for'表示时间段。

× The softer tester is my passion.

✓ Software testing is my passion.

原句中'softer tester'拼写错误且用词不当，应改为'software testing'表示软件测试。

× I very love this job.

✓ I really love this job.

'very'不能修饰动词'love'，应使用副词'really'来修饰动词。

× I worked in Shenzhen.

✓ I work in Shenzhen.

根据上下文，学生现在仍在深圳工作，应使用一般现在时。

× You will have a good opportunity to access the people from all over the world.

✓ You will have a good opportunity to meet people from all over the world.

'access'通常用于访问资源，不能用于描述见面，应使用'meet'。

× They are full of good opportunity and business opportunity for young people.

✓ It is full of good opportunities and business opportunities for young people.

'They'指代不明确，应使用单数'It'指深圳，'opportunity'应使用复数形式。

× In addition, is a good place for children and other people.

✓ In addition, it is a good place for children and other people.

句子缺少主语，应加上'it'。

× For the short term work plans, I would like work in Amazon as software tester in three years.

✓ For the short term work plans, I would like to work at Amazon as a software tester in three years.

'would like'后应接不定式'to work'，'in Amazon'应改为'at Amazon'，且缺少冠词'a'。

× For the long term work plans, I would like to seek better opportunity in foreign country.

✓ For the long term work plans, I would like to seek better opportunities in a foreign country.

'opportunity'应使用复数形式，'foreign country'前应加不定冠词'a'。