Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó bổ sung thêm chi tiết cụ thể và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I am currently a student pursuing my degree at a university in America. I focus on gaining knowledge and skills that will help me in my future career.

提案: Bạn trả lời khá tốt nhưng câu trả lời hơi dài và có sự lặp từ. Hãy cố gắng trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: I am currently working from home because I just finished my classes. I plan to take a gap year to travel and reconnect with myself.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự mạch lạc và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời logic hơn và tránh dùng những câu không hoàn chỉnh hoặc lặp từ.

例: Yes, it's a great place to work because I can manage my own schedule. For example, I can wake up late, have breakfast, and decide when to take breaks.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy thêm các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và cụ thể hơn về lý do bạn thích nơi làm việc.

例: Yes, I really like working at home because I am an introvert. I prefer staying indoors and working in a quiet environment suits me well.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh dùng từ ngữ không cần thiết như 'yeah'.

例: My future plan is to finish my university course and then continue studying by joining the residency program at my school.

× Currently I am a student now and I pursuing my degree in.

✓ Currently I am a student now and I am pursuing my degree in.

The verb 'pursuing' needs the auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense correctly. The correct form is 'I am pursuing'. This is a Present tense issue (ID 6).

× Yeah, in America, at the university, studying around me to focus, gain knowledge and skill.

✓ Yeah, I am studying at a university in America to focus on gaining knowledge and skills.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and verb, making it incomplete and confusing. Adding 'I am studying' clarifies the subject and verb. Also, 'gain knowledge and skill' should be 'gaining knowledge and skills' to match the verb form and plural noun. This is a Sentence structure error (ID 26).

× Actually, I'm working at home right now because I just finished my class at my university and I want to have a gap year to explore the world and to to reconnect with myself.

✓ Actually, I'm working at home right now because I just finished my class at my university and I want to take a gap year to explore the world and to reconnect with myself.

The phrase 'have a gap year' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'take a gap year'. Also, there is a repeated 'to' which is a typographical error. This is a Sentence structure error (ID 26).

× Oh, it's a very wonderful place. I can sleep until 9:00 and just have the breakfast and after that I will go and at 11 I will have the lunch and everything go, go. Like just I can decide what I want.

✓ Oh, it's a very wonderful place. I can sleep until 9:00 and just have breakfast. After that, I will go out, and at 11 I will have lunch. Everything goes smoothly. I can decide what I want.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect article usage ('the breakfast' and 'the lunch' should be 'breakfast' and 'lunch'). Also, 'everything go, go' is unclear and should be 'everything goes smoothly'. This is a Sentence structure error (ID 26) and Article errors (ID 22).

× just have the breakfast and after that I will go and at 11 I will have the lunch

✓ just have breakfast and after that I will go and at 11 I will have lunch

Meals like breakfast and lunch generally do not require the definite article 'the' unless referring to a specific meal. Using 'the' here is incorrect. This is an Article error (ID 22).

× Oh, I really love that. This is the perfect that I want because I am an introvert and I don't want to go outside frequently.

✓ Oh, I really love that. This is the perfect place that I want because I am an introvert and I don't want to go outside frequently.

The phrase 'the perfect that I want' is incomplete; it needs a noun such as 'place' to be grammatically correct. This is a Sentence structure error (ID 26).

× So I think just be home is very, very good for me.

✓ So I think just being at home is very, very good for me.

The phrase 'just be home' is incorrect; it should be 'just being at home' to function as a noun phrase. Also, 'at home' is the correct prepositional phrase. This is an Incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12) and Incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11).

× My future work plan is I will finish my course at university and after that I will, yeah, keep study to the residence program at my school.

✓ My future work plan is that I will finish my course at university and after that I will continue studying in the residence program at my school.

The phrase 'keep study to the residence program' is incorrect. The correct form is 'continue studying in the residence program'. Also, adding 'that' after 'plan is' improves sentence structure. This is a Future tense issue (ID 7) and Sentence structure error (ID 26).