Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and confusing because you mention working in a bank but then talk about managing forests, which seems contradictory. To improve, provide a clear and direct response to the question, avoid hesitation, and ensure your details are relevant and coherent. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I am currently working at a bank, where I handle customer accounts and financial transactions. I graduated last year, and this is my first job in the finance sector.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by correcting grammar and adding linking words for fluency. For example, use 'My office is located' instead of 'my office located'. Also, adding a bit more detail about the location or why it's notable would enrich your answer.

例: I work in Bangkok. My office is located near the famous Khao San Road, in the Samyuk area, which is known for its vibrant atmosphere and many tourists.

提案: Your answer is positive and clear but could be improved by adding linking words and more specific details to support your opinion. For example, explain what aspects of the company culture you enjoy and how it affects your work experience.

例: Yes, it is a good place to work because the company culture is very supportive. Everyone is easy-going and friendly, which makes the work environment enjoyable and motivating.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but could be more coherent and natural by using linking words and avoiding contradictory phrases like 'but yet'. Also, try to express your opinion more clearly and provide specific reasons.

例: I like the place where I work because it is quiet, which helps me focus. However, I wish there were more restaurants and activities nearby to enjoy after work.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and is somewhat unclear. To improve, use correct verb forms and structure your sentences clearly. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas and provide more specific details about your plans.

例: I am planning to apply for a work and holiday visa to Australia because I want to experience new things and explore different career paths overseas. This will help me discover what kind of work suits me best.

× Maybe you not familiar, but it's in the field of kind of like managing the forest and stuff.

✓ Maybe you are not familiar, but it's in the field of kind of like managing the forest and stuff.

The sentence is missing the auxiliary verb 'are' for the second person singular present tense. In English, the verb 'to be' requires the correct form to agree with the subject. Here, 'you' requires 'are' to form the present tense 'you are not familiar'. Without 'are', the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× I'm working in Bangkok, uh my office located near Kao San Rd. which is very famous and it's in Samyuk area.

✓ I'm working in Bangkok, uh my office is located near Kao San Rd. which is very famous and it's in Samyuk area.

The sentence lacks the verb 'is' in the phrase 'my office located'. The correct form requires the verb 'to be' to indicate location, so 'my office is located' is correct. Omitting 'is' results in an incomplete verb phrase and incorrect sentence structure.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

The question 'Would you like the place where you work?' is incorrect because 'would like' is used for expressing desires or polite requests, not for asking about current preferences. The correct modal verb to ask about current liking is 'do', so the question should be 'Do you like the place where you work?'. This fits the context of asking about present feelings.

× Obviously it's not the best place because there's not a lot of restaurant nearby and there's not a lot of activity that I could do after work, but yet it's still quiet.

✓ Obviously it's not the best place because there are not a lot of restaurants nearby and there are not a lot of activities that I could do after work, but yet it's still quiet.

The phrase 'there's not a lot of restaurant' is incorrect because 'restaurant' is singular but refers to multiple items. The correct plural form 'restaurants' should be used with 'there are' instead of 'there is'. Similarly, 'activity' should be plural 'activities' to match the context. Using 'there are' with plural nouns is grammatically correct.

× I currently having a plan to apply for the work and holiday visa to Australia and I want to experience new things, new career path in overseas and see if and see what kind of work would be.

✓ I am currently having a plan to apply for the work and holiday visa to Australia and I want to experience new things, a new career path overseas and see what kind of work it would be.

The phrase 'I currently having a plan' is incorrect because the present continuous tense requires the auxiliary verb 'am' before the '-ing' form. It should be 'I am currently having a plan'. Also, 'new career path in overseas' is incorrect; 'overseas' does not need 'in' and 'a' should be added before 'new career path' as it is singular. The phrase 'see if and see what kind of work would be' is awkward; it should be simplified to 'see what kind of work it would be' for clarity and correctness.