Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 명확하지만, 문장 연결이 조금 더 부드럽게 이루어질 수 있습니다. 예를 들어, 'I recently graduated from high school last month, so I am planning to attend university this September.'처럼 전치사와 관사를 정확히 사용하고, 문장 간 연결어를 활용해 보세요.

例: I don't work currently, and I'm not a student either because I recently graduated from high school last month. Therefore, I am planning to attend university this September.

提案: 답변이 간결하지만, 미래 계획에 대해 좀 더 구체적으로 설명하면 좋겠습니다. 또한, 문장 사이에 연결어를 사용하여 자연스럽게 이어가세요.

例: I don't currently work, but if I have a job in the future, I would like to work in New York because it offers many opportunities.

提案: 답변이 명확하고 이유도 제시했으나, 좀 더 구체적인 예시나 설명을 추가하면 좋겠습니다. 또한, 'might be' 대신 확신을 표현하는 단어를 사용해 보세요.

例: I believe New York is a great place to work because it offers numerous job opportunities and valuable experiences in various industries.

提案: 답변이 다소 모호하고 문법적으로 부자연스럽습니다. 'the result of my hard work of studying' 대신 더 자연스러운 표현을 사용하고, 구체적인 이유를 덧붙이세요.

例: I would definitely like my workplace because it would reflect the hard work I put into my studies and help me grow professionally.

提案: 문법 오류가 있습니다('a future work plans' → 'any future work plans'). 또한, 'about financial consulting' 대신 더 자연스러운 표현을 사용하고, 문장을 명확하게 다듬으세요.

例: I don't have any definite future work plans yet, but I might work in New York in the field of financial consulting.

× I don't have a future work plans yet, but I may work in New York about financial consulting.

✓ I don't have any future work plans yet, but I may work in New York in financial consulting.

The phrase 'a future work plans' is incorrect because 'plans' is plural and cannot be preceded by the singular article 'a'. Also, 'about financial consulting' is better expressed as 'in financial consulting' to indicate the field of work. The correct form is 'any future work plans' and 'in financial consulting'.