Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is informative but a bit lengthy and contains a minor error ('cerebral policy' should be 'cerebral palsy'). Try to be more concise and correct the terminology. Also, avoid listing too many disabilities in one sentence to keep it natural and clear.

例: I am currently working as an educator in an organization where I train children with special needs, including those with cerebral palsy, autism, and ADHD.

提案: Your answer is relevant but a bit repetitive and wordy. Try to avoid redundancy and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, correct subject-verb agreement ('focus' should be 'focuses').

例: I work at a vocational institute that focuses on training children with special needs in vocational skills, helping them to become independent in society.

提案: Your answer has good content but some grammatical errors ('have' should be 'has') and slightly unnatural phrasing. Try to use simpler and more natural expressions and ensure subject-verb agreement.

例: The place is well developed and equipped with modern technology and all the necessary facilities for training the children.

提案: Your answer is positive but somewhat repetitive and could be more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid repeating similar phrases.

例: Yes, I like working there because it is well developed and equipped, providing comprehensive facilities for both children and trainers to improve.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Avoid vague phrases like 'tackle more children' which can be misunderstood. Try to complete your thoughts and use clearer expressions to explain your goals.

例: My future plan is to excel in my profession by gaining experience working with children with various disabilities, so I can provide better support to them.

× Well, currently I am working in an organization which is basically a vocational institute that mainly focus on training children with special needs with vocational skills and to train them so that they can navigate independently in the society.

✓ Well, currently I am working in an organization which is basically a vocational institute that mainly focuses on training children with special needs with vocational skills and to train them so that they can navigate independently in society.

The verb 'focus' should be in the third person singular form 'focuses' to agree with the singular subject 'institute'. Also, 'in the society' is incorrect; 'in society' is the correct phrase without the definite article 'the'.

× If I talk about the place, it is very well developed with fully modernized technology and have each and every facility required for training those children.

✓ If I talk about the place, it is very well developed with fully modernized technology and has each and every facility required for training those children.

The subject 'it' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have' to maintain subject-verb agreement.