Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ звучит естественно, но можно сделать его более структурированным и добавить связующее слово для плавности. Также стоит избегать повторения слов и сделать ответ более конкретным.

例: I am currently a student, and I am preparing my resume because I plan to apply for internships soon.

提案: Ответ содержит повторения и излишние слова, что снижает его эффективность. Рекомендуется отвечать прямо на вопрос и использовать связующие слова для логичности.

例: I don't have a job at the moment since I am a student, but I am preparing my CV to apply for internships in the near future.

提案: Ответ содержит много слов-паразитов и нечетко сформулирован. Следует избегать неуверенных выражений и использовать более подходящую лексику, а также структурировать ответ.

例: Yes, it is a good place to work because the salary is high, which motivates me to continue working there.

提案: Ответ хороший, но можно улучшить связность, используя больше связующих слов и разнообразить лексику.

例: Yes, I like working there because the salary is quite high, which motivates me. Moreover, the company provides excellent benefits and a friendly environment, making the job enjoyable.

提案: Ответ содержит повторения и некоторые ошибки в использовании слов. Рекомендуется использовать более точные выражения и избегать тавтологии.

例: I don't have specific plans yet, but I hope to find a good job with a high salary and a flexible schedule.

× Currently I am a student and I am working on my resume for my future job.

✓ Currently I am a student and I am working on my resume for my future job.

No correction needed for prepositions in this sentence.

× Well, as I said earlier, I don't have a job and I am a student but yet I am working on my CV to apply for internships in the future.

✓ Well, as I said earlier, I don't have a job and I am a student, but I am working on my CV to apply for internships in the future.

The phrase 'but yet' is redundant; 'but' alone is sufficient to connect the clauses. Also, a comma is needed before 'but' to separate the clauses properly.

× Umm, well, I would suggest that yes, because I have a big salary, uh, and I'm pretty sure that that's the main reason why I still work, because I like attracting big money.

✓ Umm, well, I would say yes, because I have a big salary, uh, and I'm pretty sure that's the main reason why I still work, because I like earning a lot of money.

The phrase 'I would suggest that yes' is awkward; 'I would say yes' is more natural. Also, 'attracting big money' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'earning a lot of money'.

× Yes, because it's a good place to work. The salary is quite high which is what motivates me to stay, and additionally the company offers good benefits and a friendly working environment which makes the job more enjoyable.

✓ Yes, because it's a good place to work. The salary is quite high, which motivates me to stay, and additionally, the company offers good benefits and a friendly working environment, which makes the job more enjoyable.

Commas are needed before 'which' clauses to separate the relative clauses properly. Also, adding commas after 'additionally' improves readability.

× I don't have specific plans for the future, but I think that I would like to have a a quite good job with a enormously big salary and I want the schedule to be flexible for me.

✓ I don't have specific plans for the future, but I think that I would like to have a quite good job with an enormously big salary, and I want the schedule to be flexible for me.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound as in 'enormously'. Also, the phrase 'a a quite good job' has a repeated 'a' which should be corrected to a single 'a'.