Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时句子结构较复杂且有语法错误，表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免冗长，同时注意语法准确性。

例: I have been teaching strategy management at a university for two years. I enjoy it because I can share my experience with students, which helps them in their careers.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误，缺少动词，且句子结构不够连贯。建议使用完整句子，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: I work at Xinhua University, which is located in Dongguan City, Guangdong Province. This area is famous for its manufacturing industry.

提案: 回答不完整且重复，表达不清晰。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复，并补充具体理由。

例: Yes, it is a great place to work because I can do my best and communicate well with students and colleagues. This makes my job enjoyable and rewarding.

提案: 回答中信息重复且表达不够自然。建议合并信息，使用更自然的表达方式，并注意语法。

例: Definitely, I like working at Xinhua University in Dongguan Province. I feel very free and comfortable there.

提案: 回答表达不够流畅，语法错误较多。建议使用清晰的句子结构，准确表达未来计划。

例: My future plans are to improve my teaching skills and to apply for a PhD degree.

× I'm a teacher working in a university for two years and I teach strategy management, which I really enjoy because it allows me to share my experience with students, so it's very fun and helpful for students to their career.

✓ I'm a teacher working in a university and have been teaching strategy management for two years, which I really enjoy because it allows me to share my experience with students, so it's very fun and helpful for students' careers.

句子中使用了现在进行时态“working in a university for two years”，但表示持续的动作应使用现在完成时态“have been teaching”。此外，“helpful for students to their career”表达不正确，应改为“helpful for students' careers”，表示对学生职业的帮助。

× I work in Xinhua University which located in Dongguan City, Guangdong Province, which famous for its manufacture industry.

✓ I work at Xinhua University, which is located in Dongguan City, Guangdong Province, which is famous for its manufacturing industry.

句子中缺少系动词“is”，导致结构不完整，应补充“is located”和“is famous”。另外，“manufacture industry”应改为“manufacturing industry”，表示制造业。

× Yes, it's a very good place to work where I can I can do my best to work and communicate with students and other teachers which give me some very fun and rewarding. Also if.

✓ Yes, it's a very good place to work where I can do my best and communicate with students and other teachers, which gives me a lot of fun and is rewarding.

句子中重复了“I can”，且“which give me some very fun and rewarding”主谓不一致，应改为“which gives me a lot of fun and is rewarding”。“Also if.”为不完整句，应删除。

× The place I work is Xinhua University, the company, the campus located in Dongguan Province, and also I feel very freedom in the place.

✓ The place I work is Xinhua University; the campus is located in Dongguan Province, and I also feel very free there.

“the company”与上下文不符，应删除；“the campus located”缺少系动词“is”；“feel very freedom”中“freedom”是名词，应改为形容词“free”；“in the place”应改为“there”。

× Now for me I need to do 2 things when the first thing is I need to do my teaching job very good and 2nd I need to apply a doctor degree. Maybe we can say that PhD degree.

✓ Now, for me, I need to do two things: first, I need to do my teaching job very well; second, I need to apply for a doctoral degree, maybe we can say a PhD degree.

“do my teaching job very good”中“good”应为副词“well”；“apply a doctor degree”应为“apply for a doctoral degree”；数字“2”应写为“two”；句子结构需调整以更清晰表达。