Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but lacks natural phrasing and has grammatical errors. Try to form complete sentences and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I am currently a senior student at an international school where both Chinese and foreign teachers teach. I enjoy studying there because it gives me the opportunity to learn about different cultures and improve my language skills.

提案: Your answer has unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes. Be specific and use correct expressions. Also, avoid redundancy and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I work at a marketing company located in Guangzhou. It is just a two-minute walk from my house, which is very convenient. I enjoy working there because marketing is one of my strengths.

提案: There are some unclear and incorrect phrases like 'smoking condition' and 'virus benefit'. Use precise vocabulary and complete your sentences. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I think it's a good place to work because the company offers excellent working conditions. For example, employees receive a monthly bonus, which motivates us to perform better. In addition, the company provides benefits such as health insurance.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains grammatical errors. Make sure to complete your thoughts and use linking words to explain your reasons clearly.

例: I am quite fond of my workplace because it provides a good chance for me to practice my skills. For example, I can improve my public speaking, which helps me gain confidence.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has awkward phrasing and filler words. Try to speak more clearly and use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

例: In the future, I plan to learn more and gain experience over the next few months and years. After that, I hope to start my own company and make a good profit.

× Student I currently a senior student at an International School where the teachers are both Chinese and foreigner.

✓ I am currently a senior student at an International School where the teachers are both Chinese and foreigners.

The original sentence lacks a verb and proper subject-verb agreement. 'Student I currently a senior student' is incomplete. Adding 'I am' corrects the sentence structure. Also, 'foreigner' should be plural 'foreigners' to match 'teachers are both Chinese and foreigners.'

× I enjoy studies there because they give me opportunity to learn from different culture, improve my language skills.

✓ I enjoy studying there because they give me the opportunity to learn from different cultures and improve my language skills.

'Enjoy studies' is incorrect; 'enjoy studying' is the correct verb + -ing form. 'Give me opportunity' needs the article 'the' before 'opportunity.' 'Different culture' should be plural 'different cultures' to indicate variety. Also, 'and' is needed to connect the two verbs 'learn' and 'improve.'

× Well, I work at a marketing phone.

✓ Well, I work at a marketing firm.

'Marketing phone' is incorrect; likely intended 'marketing firm' or 'marketing company.' 'Phone' is a device, not a workplace. Correcting to 'marketing firm' makes the sentence meaningful.

× It's located in the Guangzhou.

✓ It's located in Guangzhou.

'The' is not used before city names like Guangzhou. Removing 'the' corrects the sentence.

× I quite enjoy to doing that because it's my strong side.

✓ I quite enjoy doing that because it's my strong side.

'Enjoy to doing' is incorrect; 'enjoy doing' is correct. Also, 'quite' should be placed before 'enjoy' as in the correction.

× Yes, I think it's a good place to work because the company offers excellent smoking condition.

✓ Yes, I think it's a good place to work because the company offers excellent working conditions.

'Smoking condition' is incorrect; likely intended 'working conditions.' Also, 'condition' should be plural 'conditions' to indicate the environment.

× For example, employee receive monthly bonus which motivate us to perform better.

✓ For example, employees receive monthly bonuses which motivate us to perform better.

'Employee' should be plural 'employees' to match the plural verb 'receive.' 'Monthly bonus' should be plural 'bonuses' to agree with 'employees.' 'Motivate' agrees with plural subject 'bonuses.'

× In addition, the company provides a virus benefit such as health insurance and.

✓ In addition, the company provides various benefits such as health insurance.

'Virus benefit' is incorrect; likely intended 'various benefits.' The sentence is incomplete and ends with 'and.' Removing 'and' and correcting the phrase improves clarity.

× While I quite be fond of my working place as it provides a good chance for me to practice my skills.

✓ I am quite fond of my workplace as it provides a good chance for me to practice my skills.

'While I quite be fond' is incorrect; 'I am quite fond' is correct. 'Working place' is better as one word 'workplace.' The sentence is incomplete and 'while' is unnecessary here.

× For example, I can speak more in the public, I can help help me to increase.

✓ For example, I can speak more in public, which helps me to improve.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains repetition 'help help.' 'In the public' should be 'in public.' The second clause is incomplete and unclear; rephrasing clarifies the meaning.

× While my future working schedule, I think is to learn more and to gain more experience in the few months and a few years.

✓ Regarding my future work plans, I think I will learn more and gain more experience in the next few months and years.

'While my future working schedule' is incomplete and incorrect. Replacing with 'Regarding my future work plans' clarifies the topic. 'In the few months and a few years' should be 'in the next few months and years.'

× And then I hope that I can, you know, start a company by my own and try to make a lot more profit.

✓ And then I hope that I can, you know, start a company on my own and try to make a lot more profit.

'By my own' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'on my own.' This is a common prepositional phrase indicating independence.