Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và phát âm sai, đồng thời sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, dễ hiểu. Hãy chú ý đến việc sử dụng thì và cấu trúc câu chính xác.

例: I am currently a student and this autumn I will be in Grade 11. I am preparing myself with foundational knowledge for my future career.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời đúng trọng tâm câu hỏi nhưng nên tránh lặp lại thông tin đã nói trước đó. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ.

例: I don't work at the moment because I am a student. However, my school is quite close to my house, and it takes me about 20 minutes to get there by motorcycle.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và cung cấp lý do cụ thể, sử dụng câu đơn giản và chính xác.

例: Although I don't work, my school is a good place to study because it provides a strong foundation for college and university opportunities.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lỗi sai và trình bày ý rõ ràng, có liên kết logic.

例: Yes, I like my school because it is beneficial for me. My classmates are friendly and helpful, and the teachers are excellent.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu hoàn chỉnh để diễn đạt ý tưởng rõ ràng hơn. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và phát âm, đồng thời sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc.

例: I am interested in both economics and technology, so I am trying to decide which field to focus on for my future career to make the best decision.

× Well, I would say that I'm currently a student and I have school this autumn I will be in Gray 11 and so I will show in the workforce is well now I need to like be using Knowledge Foundation for my future career.

✓ Well, I would say that I'm currently a student and I have school this autumn. I will be in Grade 11 and so I will show in the workforce as well. Now I need to be using Knowledge Foundation for my future career.

The sentence contains tense inconsistency and awkward phrasing. 'I will show in the workforce is well' is incorrect; it should be 'I will show in the workforce as well.' Also, 'be using Knowledge Foundation' is awkward; it should be 'be using the Knowledge Foundation.' Splitting into clearer sentences improves clarity.

× Just take me 20 minutes traveling by motorcycle.

✓ It just takes me 20 minutes to travel by motorcycle.

The original sentence lacks a subject and uses 'traveling' incorrectly. The correct structure is 'It takes me [time] to [verb].' Using 'to travel' is the correct infinitive form after 'takes me.'

× Well, actually I'm currently studying in a high school for to get this is this is really helpful for not only from my foundation college but also for my university opportunities in the future.

✓ Well, actually I'm currently studying at a high school to get this. It is really helpful not only for my foundation college but also for my university opportunities in the future.

The preposition 'in' should be 'at' when referring to studying at a school. The phrase 'for to get this' is incorrect; it should be 'to get this.' Also, 'helpful for not only from' is incorrect; it should be 'helpful not only for ... but also for ...' for parallel structure.

× I would say yes because my work late is not only beneficial for me, it was also a great chance for me to experience they worked time because my colleges are not only friendly but also helpful and leader is so a marvel.

✓ I would say yes because my workplace is not only beneficial for me, it is also a great chance for me to experience work time because my colleagues are not only friendly but also helpful, and the leader is marvelous.

'Work late' should be 'workplace.' 'It was' should be 'it is' to maintain present tense. 'They worked time' is incorrect; it should be 'work time.' 'Colleges' should be 'colleagues.' 'Leader is so a marvel' is awkward; 'the leader is marvelous' is correct.

× Personally speaking, I'm in two minds about economics and technology, so I'm trying to be more specific about the traps on the places I want to work in the future that to make the best. Decision.

✓ Personally speaking, I'm in two minds about economics and technology, so I'm trying to be more specific about the topics and places I want to work in the future to make the best decision.

The phrase 'the traps on the places' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'topics and places.' The sentence ends abruptly with 'that to make the best. Decision.' which is incorrect. It should be 'to make the best decision.' The sentence structure is corrected for clarity and completeness.