Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较为自然，但表达不够简洁，且有些词汇使用不准确。建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，并使用更准确的词汇。

例: I currently work as a marketing manager for a company in Hubei Province that supplies construction materials like cement and aggregates.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，影响理解。建议加强语法练习，使用简单句表达清楚信息，并注意发音和词汇准确性。

例: I work at a state-owned company that produces cement. It is the oldest cement company in China with over 100 years of history in the construction materials industry.

提案: 回答内容不够连贯，语法和词汇错误较多，表达不完整。建议练习句子连接和时态使用，表达观点时要清晰完整。

例: Yes, it is a good place to work. After the COVID-19 pandemic, having a stable job became very important for young people. Although the salary is not very high, the work environment is relaxed.

提案: 回答中有语法和词汇错误，表达不够清晰。建议注意主谓一致，使用正确的词汇，并且句子结构更完整。

例: Yes, I enjoy the supportive atmosphere at work, especially my teammates. They motivate me, which is very important because we can build strong working relationships and become like a family.

提案: 回答表达不清晰，语法错误较多，时间表达混乱。建议练习时间状语的正确使用，句子结构要完整，表达未来计划时要具体明确。

例: In the next two to three years, I plan to work at my company's overseas branches, possibly in South Africa or South America. I believe this experience will help me improve my skills and advance my career.

× Currently, I work as a marketing manager for Hubei Province at a company that provides construction materials such as cement, aggregates, things like that.

✓ Currently, I work as a marketing manager in Hubei Province at a company that provides construction materials such as cement, aggregates, things like that.

介词“for”用在这里不合适，表示职位所在地区时应使用“in”。

× Oh, I work at a state owned corporation on them that washing cement which is most oldest which is the oldest camping cement company in China.

✓ Oh, I work at a state-owned corporation that produces cement, which is the oldest cement company in China.

“on them that washing cement”表达不正确，应使用“that produces cement”来表达生产水泥的意思。

× which is most oldest which is the oldest camping cement company in China.

✓ which is the oldest cement company in China.

“most oldest”是错误的比较级用法，形容词“old”用最高级时应直接用“the oldest”。

× We have over 100 history in the in the construction materials feared.

✓ We have over 100 years of history in the construction materials field.

“history”不可数，需用“years of history”表示历史年数；“feared”应为“field”，表示领域。

× after the COVID-19 pandemic, finding a stable job, it becoming became the top priority for most of younger generations.

✓ After the COVID-19 pandemic, finding a stable job became the top priority for most of the younger generations.

“becoming became”重复且时态错误，应使用过去时“became”；“most of younger generations”缺少定冠词“the”。

× So after that I found the job and even though the seller is not higher, not high, but I fear the work is relax and.

✓ So after that I found the job and even though the salary is not high, the work is relaxed.

“seller”应为“salary”；“not higher, not high”表达重复且不自然；“fear”应为“feel”；“relax”应为形容词“relaxed”。

× I enjoyed the supportive atmosphere in my work, especially my teammate.

✓ I enjoy the supportive atmosphere at my work, especially my teammates.

“in my work”应为“at my work”或“at work”；“teammate”应为复数“teammates”。

× I find my off my teammate or Spotify motivated.

✓ I find my teammates very motivating.

句子结构混乱，“off my teammate or Spotify”无意义，应改为“I find my teammates very motivating”。

× That's very important for me because we can build over working relationship, we can be friend and we can be family.

✓ That's very important for me because we can build a good working relationship; we can be friends and we can be like family.

“over working relationship”错误，应为“a good working relationship”；“friend”应为复数“friends”；连接句子时用分号更合适。

× Maybe the next year or the next day or two to three years, I will workin, workin my overseas branches, maybe in South Africa or the South. America.

✓ Maybe next year or in two to three years, I will work in my overseas branches, maybe in South Africa or South America.

“the next day”不合适；“workin”拼写错误，应为“work in”；“the South. America”应为“South America”。

× I believe this can help me to improve my. Potential promote.

✓ I believe this can help me to improve my potential and get promoted.

“Potential promote”表达不完整，应为“improve my potential and get promoted”。