Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer wa chotto fukuzatsu de, 'walk' to iu kotoba ga machigatte imasu. Shizen de tadashii eigo wo tsukatte, motto rikai shi yasui you ni kotaete kudasai. Mata, 5-bun wo koenai you ni shite kudasai.

例: I work in the investment banking division of a financial securities company. I have been with the same team for five years.

提案: Kotae ga fukuzatsu de, 'walk' no tsukaikata ga machigatte imasu. Tokoro no setsumei wa motto meikaku ni shite, fukuzatsu na kotoba wa sakan ni shite kudasai.

例: I work in Marunouchi, Tokyo. My office is right in front of Tokyo Station, which is very convenient because there are many facilities and restaurants nearby.

提案: Kotae ga fukuzatsu de, imi ga wakari nikui desu. Motto seikaku ni, rikai shi yasui kotoba de kotaete kudasai. Fuyou na kurikaeshi wa sakete kudasai.

例: Yes, it is a good place to work because it is very convenient for shopping and dining. Also, many of our clients have offices nearby.

提案: Kotae ga fukuzatsu de, eigo no tsukaikata ga machigatte imasu. Motto shizen de, rikai shi yasui kotoba de kotaete kudasai. Fuyou na kotoba ya kurikaeshi wa sakete kudasai.

例: Yes, I like the place where I work. It is very convenient and easy to access other train lines because of its location.

提案: Kotae wa rikai dekimasu ga, 'plowing' no you na machigatta kotoba ga arimasu. Motto seikaku ni, shizen na eigo de kotaete kudasai. Fuyou na kurikaeshi wa sakete kudasai.

例: I have not decided my future plans exactly, but I think I will change my job because I am very busy. I want to acquire new skills and experience a different work environment.

× I walk. I'm walking at a Financial Securities Co investment banking division.

✓ I work. I'm working at the Financial Securities Co investment banking division.

The student used 'walk' instead of 'work'. 'Walk' is incorrect in this context because the question is about employment. The correct verb is 'work'. Also, 'I'm walking' should be 'I'm working' to indicate current employment. Suggestion: Use 'work' to describe your job, not 'walk'.

× I have been working for five years in the same team in the same company.

✓ I have been working for five years on the same team in the same company.

The preposition 'in' is less appropriate when referring to a team; 'on' is commonly used to indicate membership or participation in a team. Suggestion: Use 'on' with 'team' to express involvement.

× I walk in Marinacci. A Tokyo.

✓ I work in Marinacci, Tokyo.

The phrase 'A Tokyo' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'in' for locations, and 'Tokyo' does not need an article. Also, 'walk' should be 'work'. Suggestion: Use 'work in [place]' and omit unnecessary articles.

× It's my my office is right in front of the Tokyo station.

✓ My office is right in front of Tokyo Station.

The sentence has redundancy with 'It's my my office'. The correct structure is simply 'My office is...'. Also, 'Tokyo Station' is a proper noun and should be capitalized without 'the'. Suggestion: Avoid redundant phrases and capitalize proper nouns.

× It's very convenient praise because there are a lot of facilities, restaurants and most things is.

✓ It's very convenient because there are a lot of facilities, restaurants, and most things are nearby.

The word 'praise' is incorrect here and seems misplaced. Also, 'most things is' is grammatically incorrect; 'things' is plural, so the verb should be 'are'. Suggestion: Remove irrelevant words and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× I think it's very convenient to shop having have having a food or. A bee sting. Our clients, because our clients. Office are located.

✓ I think it's very convenient for shopping, having food, or meeting our clients because our clients' offices are located nearby.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains incorrect prepositions and word forms. 'Having have having a food or. A bee sting.' is unclear and incorrect. Also, 'clients. Office are' should be 'clients' offices are'. Suggestion: Use clear phrases and correct possessive forms.

× As I mentioned, it's very convenient and also, uh, it's very. Come. Easy to get too. Other train cause. It's location.

✓ As I mentioned, it's very convenient and also very easy to get to other trains because of its location.

The original sentence has fragmented parts and incorrect prepositions: 'get too' should be 'get to', 'cause' should be 'because', and 'It's location' should be 'its location'. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions and possessive pronouns.

× Well, actually I have not decided exactly plowing yet, but I think I'm going to change my job 'cause my my job is very busy.

✓ Well, actually I have not decided my plans yet, but I think I'm going to change my job because my job is very busy.

'Plowing' is incorrect; the intended word is likely 'plans'. Also, 'cause' is informal; 'because' is better in formal speech. Suggestion: Use correct nouns and formal conjunctions.

× I'm I'm always busy with my job on the I think it's time to change to acquire new skills and change my environment.

✓ I'm always busy with my job, and I think it's time to change to acquire new skills and change my environment.

The sentence has repetition 'I'm I'm' and an incomplete phrase 'on the'. The corrected sentence removes redundancy and clarifies meaning. Suggestion: Avoid repetition and incomplete phrases for clarity.