Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá đầy đủ nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt chưa tự nhiên, ví dụ như 'in an majoring' nên là 'majoring in'. Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: I am currently a senior student at International University, majoring in English Linguistics. Besides studying, I work as a teaching assistant at a language center in District 1, which helps me improve my English skills and gain practical experience.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp số nhiều và số ít, ví dụ 'a central' nên là 'a center' và 'which have' nên là 'which has'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn và có thêm chi tiết để làm phong phú nội dung.

例: At the moment, I work at a nonprofit language center in District 1 that supports students from disadvantaged backgrounds.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện phát âm và chính tả (ví dụ 'sentra' nên là 'center'), đồng thời câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu văn trôi chảy và tránh lặp từ.

例: Of course, it is a good place to work because the center helps disadvantaged students by providing them with opportunities similar to those of regular students, such as access to reading materials and learning from foreign teachers.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự mạch lạc và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý không rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh câu rời rạc và thêm liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn.

例: Absolutely, I enjoy working here because I have made many friends of the same age and with similar interests. Also, I have the chance to learn communication skills from foreign teachers.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn rất ngắn và thiếu mạch lạc, nhiều câu không hoàn chỉnh và lặp từ. Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng, đầy đủ ý và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh để thể hiện ý định tương lai một cách rõ ràng.

例: In the future, I plan to become a teacher, preferably working with children in an international environment. This job will help me improve my communication skills and gain valuable experience.

× Currently, I am a senior student at International University in an majoring in English Linguistics.

✓ Currently, I am a senior student at International University majoring in English Linguistics.

The preposition 'in' before 'an majoring' is incorrect and 'an' is unnecessary. The phrase should be 'majoring in English Linguistics' without 'in an'. This corrects the prepositional phrase and article usage.

× Besides studying, I also work as a teaching assistant at a language center in District 1 which helped me improve my English skills and gain my practical experiences.

✓ Besides studying, I also work as a teaching assistant at a language center in District 1 which helps me improve my English skills and gain practical experience.

The verb 'helped' should be in present tense 'helps' to match the ongoing action. Also, 'practical experiences' should be singular 'practical experience' as it is an uncountable noun in this context.

× At the moment I work at a central in District 1.

✓ At the moment I work at a center in District 1.

The word 'central' is incorrect here; the correct noun is 'center' to refer to a place of work.

× This center is a nonprofit center which have students from disadvantaged backgrounds.

✓ This center is a nonprofit center which has students from disadvantaged backgrounds.

The verb 'have' does not agree with the singular subject 'center'. It should be 'has' for correct subject-verb agreement.

× This sentra helps disadvantage students to have more chances.

✓ This center helps disadvantaged students to have more opportunities.

The word 'sentra' is a typo and should be 'center'. 'Disadvantage' should be the adjective form 'disadvantaged'. Also, 'chances' is better replaced with 'opportunities' for clarity.

× Like normal student to go to school to have many benefits like reading materials, learning with foreigners, teachers.

✓ Like normal students going to school to have many benefits like reading materials, learning with foreigners, and teachers.

'Student' should be plural 'students' to match the context. The sentence structure is also improved for clarity.

× Absolutely, working here makes me. Got more friends who have the same age but may and same interest happening.

✓ Absolutely, working here allows me to make more friends who are the same age and share similar interests.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs restructuring to form a complete and coherent sentence.

× People from a poor backgrounds.

✓ People from poor backgrounds.

The article 'a' is incorrect before the plural noun 'backgrounds'. It should be omitted.

× Also, I can learn from foreigner teachers to communicate.

✓ Also, I can learn to communicate from foreign teachers.

'Foreigner teachers' is incorrect; the correct term is 'foreign teachers'. The sentence structure is adjusted for clarity.

× I am about to be a teacher.

✓ I am going to be a teacher.

'Am about to' implies immediate action; 'am going to' is more appropriate for future plans.

× I found up working with the children in.

✓ I look forward to working with children.

The original sentence is incomplete and incorrect. The corrected sentence expresses the intended meaning clearly.

× Working in international environment.

✓ Working in an international environment.

The article 'an' is needed before 'international environment'.

× This job help me too.

✓ This job helps me too.

The verb 'help' should be in third person singular present tense 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'job'.

× Improve my communication communication skills also help me to increase my.

✓ It improves my communication skills and also helps me to develop further.

The sentence is incomplete and repetitive. It needs restructuring and correction of repeated words for clarity.