Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议加强语法基础，避免口语中的错误表达，同时注意句子结构的完整性和逻辑性。可以尝试使用简单明了的句子表达自己的身份和计划。

例: I work as a drama teacher at a primary school, and I am also preparing to pursue my master's degree in the UK. If everything goes well, I will start my studies this September.

提案: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，建议直接回答问题，使用完整句子，并注意时态和主谓一致。

例: I work in Beijing as a drama teacher at a primary school.

提案: 回答中有语法和发音错误，表达不够连贯，建议使用连词连接句子，避免断句，丰富细节描述。

例: Yes, it is a great place to work because the students are very cute and eager to share their feelings and ideas. Moreover, they are curious about many things, which makes conversations with them interesting.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰，建议注意时态和词汇的正确使用，句子结构应完整且连贯。可以具体说明喜欢的原因。

例: Yes, I like working at this primary school because there are many promotion opportunities. Also, the location is very convenient since I can reach it by subway in just 20 minutes.

提案: 回答较为自然且内容丰富，但可以更具体地说明未来的计划，使用更多连接词使表达更流畅。

例: I am a bit unsure about my future work plans because things are always changing. However, since I am only 23, I believe I have many possibilities ahead and I want to explore new fields to find what suits me best.

× Actually both be 'cause I'm a Walker as a drama teacher in a primary school.

✓ Actually both because I'm a worker as a drama teacher in a primary school.

句中“both be”用法错误，应使用“both because”表示原因。此外，“Walker”应为“worker”，表示职业。

× If everything goes according to the applying, I will be formal T student.

✓ If everything goes according to the plan, I will be a formal student.

“according to the applying”表达不正确，应为“according to the plan”表示“按照计划”。“formal T student”不通顺，应为“a formal student”。

× Actually I based in Beijing and the same time I'm drama teacher in a primary school.

✓ Actually I am based in Beijing and at the same time I'm a drama teacher in a primary school.

缺少动词“am”，且“and the same time”应为“and at the same time”。“I'm drama teacher”缺少冠词，应为“I'm a drama teacher”。

× Yeah, definitely be 'cause you know, lots of student are very cute.

✓ Yeah, definitely because you know, lots of students are very cute.

“lots of student”中“student”应为复数“students”，表示“许多学生”。

× They are willing to share their feelings and ideas about many sing.

✓ They are willing to share their feelings and ideas about many things.

“many sing”拼写错误，应为“many things”，表示“许多事情”。

× At the same time, I seeing this place is very convenient be 'cause I can.

✓ At the same time, I see this place is very convenient because I can.

“I seeing”应为“I see”，动词不应使用现在分词形式。

× Gold displaced by subway just to 20 minutes.

✓ Go to the place by subway in just 20 minutes.

“Gold displaced”拼写错误，应为“go to the place”，“just to 20 minutes”应为“in just 20 minutes”，表示时间。

× If everything goes according to the applying, I will be formal T student. In this Sept.

✓ If everything goes according to the plan, I will be a formal student this September.

“will be formal T student”缺少冠词且表达不准确，应为“will be a formal student”。“In this Sept.”应为“this September”，时间表达更自然。

× Actually I based in Beijing and the same time I'm drama teacher in a primary school.

✓ Actually I am based in Beijing and at the same time I'm a drama teacher in a primary school.

缺少介词“at”在“at the same time”中，且缺少动词“am”。

× Yeah, definitely be cause in this primary school there are lots of promotion opportunities, a few hard work, you can get a higher salary.

✓ Yeah, definitely because in this primary school there are lots of promotion opportunities, if you work hard, you can get a higher salary.

“a few hard work”用法错误，应为“if you work hard”，表示条件。

× At the same time, I seeing this place is very convenient be 'cause I can.

✓ At the same time, I see this place is very convenient because I can.

“I seeing”应改为“I see”，动词不应使用现在分词形式。

× Gold displaced by subway just to 20 minutes.

✓ Go to the place by subway in just 20 minutes.

“Gold displaced”拼写错误，应为“go to the place”，“just to 20 minutes”应为“in just 20 minutes”，表示时间。